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Shirts & Skirts; The Snake & The Peach
Published 6th Aug 2022
| Edited 7th Aug 2022
Author's Note
Original upgraded from a simple shape poem to a ~magic eye (kind of). View in desktop mode, then pull image away until it becomes blurry.
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Anonymous
7th Aug 2022 00:02am
Lots to enjoy here--
I enjoy the language.
Some very nice rhythms.
Like the acronyms & slang.
Here and there the poem doesn't make any sense, as opposed to stretches where I felt very well-situated.
Lack of syntax, either through line-integrity / punctuation / an intuitive sense of where the phrasing brok, as well as the visual format, challenged me for reasons that weren't apparent.
Enjoyed!
I enjoy the language.
Some very nice rhythms.
Like the acronyms & slang.
Here and there the poem doesn't make any sense, as opposed to stretches where I felt very well-situated.
Lack of syntax, either through line-integrity / punctuation / an intuitive sense of where the phrasing brok, as well as the visual format, challenged me for reasons that weren't apparent.
Enjoyed!
7th Aug 2022 00:18am
Thanks, Mark!
I'm still trying to properly format this without breaking the image.
Funny note, if you turn the image upside-down, it looks like Abe Lincoln.
I'm still trying to properly format this without breaking the image.
Funny note, if you turn the image upside-down, it looks like Abe Lincoln.
7th Aug 2022 2:09am
