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Amy
There's something about the way she moves
the warmth of her smile
the way it reaches her eyes
and blends with mischievous intelligence
that radiates from within
I won't try to reason why
there are butterflies
when I watch her
a deep satisfaction in her voice
and laughter
She keeps me riveted
coming back for more
There's simplicity in the unattainable
and I like it
that my mind adores her
my body wants her
this lust
will remain pure
Published 18th Jul 2022
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18th Jul 2022 7:00am
18th Jul 2022 7:03am
18th Jul 2022 7:26am
Great convincible writer's tone in this one. This is brilliant writing. I can see luv scenes from movies ad I read. 🌷🍑💋💃🛳️🌃💖💯. This is elegant.
18th Jul 2022 7:30am
Aw, thank you so much! I'm glad you found elegance in my little piece about a fun little crush. I can imagine a few movie love scenes myself ;-)
18th Jul 2022 7:35am
Amy who?
Winehouse?
Reinheart?
God damn I wanna know 🤯
Could drop the double “and” in the first stanza, maybe the last line of it too, possibly just the “that”
Winehouse?
Reinheart?
God damn I wanna know 🤯
Could drop the double “and” in the first stanza, maybe the last line of it too, possibly just the “that”
18th Jul 2022 8:18am
Lost a couple "ands" We'll see how that sits.
As for who... well, a woman has to have some secrets. ;-)
As for who... well, a woman has to have some secrets. ;-)
19th Jul 2022 6:50am
Sooo, I r/l'd this yesterday and wanted to comment without being naughty. (which I apologize for now, because I just can't!) So I thought I would read it a few more times and then maybe just a few more for good measure... ;)). heh heh...
Needles to say, I'm all verklempt..... and loving it.
I mean... that last stanza is delicious fire, Ps. 🔥
Of course, I was too emotionally caught up in the crush reveal to see any potential critique (good job Gaps!) but that in itself is feedback, methinks
When a poem allows me to take flight so easily into rich fantasy, well damn, it's definitely a total keeper.
*grinning, fans myself *
I think it's close to or over 24 hours now and it's still one of the best things I've read!
Thank you.
"Amy" is a lucky lady.
(btw, the hanging is DEFINITELY part of the fun!)
🌹 - 💙
B
Needles to say, I'm all verklempt..... and loving it.
I mean... that last stanza is delicious fire, Ps. 🔥
Of course, I was too emotionally caught up in the crush reveal to see any potential critique (good job Gaps!) but that in itself is feedback, methinks
When a poem allows me to take flight so easily into rich fantasy, well damn, it's definitely a total keeper.
*grinning, fans myself *
I think it's close to or over 24 hours now and it's still one of the best things I've read!
Thank you.
"Amy" is a lucky lady.
(btw, the hanging is DEFINITELY part of the fun!)
🌹 - 💙
B
19th Jul 2022 7:11am
Amy doesn't know I exist, so she may, indeed, be lucky lol
Thank you for this spectacular comment! I certainly don't mind a naughty comment from you. This was very, very fun to read, and I'm thrilled that you like it so much. Nice to have someone share in the enthusiasm of my crush.
You're the best :-)
Thank you for this spectacular comment! I certainly don't mind a naughty comment from you. This was very, very fun to read, and I'm thrilled that you like it so much. Nice to have someone share in the enthusiasm of my crush.
You're the best :-)
19th Jul 2022 9:01am
Dear PS,
I love a good mystery and this was a good mystery. I think you did a wonderful job setting up the reader to create an image of your desire for this person knowing it won’t be consummated and enjoying the fantasy of it with all the intensity of reality. Great piece. H 🌷
I love a good mystery and this was a good mystery. I think you did a wonderful job setting up the reader to create an image of your desire for this person knowing it won’t be consummated and enjoying the fantasy of it with all the intensity of reality. Great piece. H 🌷
19th Jul 2022 9:11am
Thank you so much :-)
It's been quite some time since I've had such a big crush from afar, and I'm finding it rather fun. I'm so glad that comes through in the poem. Really appreciate your take on this one.
It's been quite some time since I've had such a big crush from afar, and I'm finding it rather fun. I'm so glad that comes through in the poem. Really appreciate your take on this one.
