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Unfuckable
It’s too much
How the space crackles
Between us.
I’m never going to be enough
For you
To love
Completely.
You can push
Doesn’t mean much
When I’m on the floor
Crying out for something more.
You’re mad at the unlit candle
Though you hold the match,
You hold everything
Yet leave me untouched.
Polishing a wooden table
Until it’s splinters
Only wastes time.
How the space crackles
Between us.
I’m never going to be enough
For you
To love
Completely.
You can push
Doesn’t mean much
When I’m on the floor
Crying out for something more.
You’re mad at the unlit candle
Though you hold the match,
You hold everything
Yet leave me untouched.
Polishing a wooden table
Until it’s splinters
Only wastes time.
Published 10th Jul 2022
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23rd Jul 2022 6:32pm
For sure your heartbreak emotion come through in this poem.
“You’re mad at the unlit candle. Though you hold the match” - They want you to act happy and be outgoing but haven’t made any effort to nurture those traits from you, or they may actually subdue them.
“Polishing a wooden table. Until it’s splinters. Only wastes time.” – Made me think of arm candy. Have a good-looking lady by their side, but just for show, not for emotional interaction.
Cait good poem.
“You’re mad at the unlit candle. Though you hold the match” - They want you to act happy and be outgoing but haven’t made any effort to nurture those traits from you, or they may actually subdue them.
“Polishing a wooden table. Until it’s splinters. Only wastes time.” – Made me think of arm candy. Have a good-looking lady by their side, but just for show, not for emotional interaction.
Cait good poem.
23rd Jul 2022 8:48pm
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6th Sep 2022 1:55pm
Love the imagery and how domestic, commonplace they are. Reminds one of the home that wasn't to be. I have one small feedback: I think line breaks can enhance the drama. Maybe you could give it a try. Keep them coming.
