The String Section

I like this poem very much. The concept is fantastic! My only quibble is that you established a rhythm with the first two lines and then broke that rhythm. Most of the lines follow the same rhythm/meter of four iambic feet. I know sonnets, especially modern ones, don’t necessarily follow a strict meter, but I wonder if you could make all the lines match rhythmically.

Oh my goodness! Yes! You have a very perceptive eye!

I will make improvements accordingly!  

I give many thanks to you, and be sure to let me know what you think!

I've read sonnets from time to time, though I've never studied them or have yet attempted to write one. The syntax used in some to fit the meter and rhyme can feel off to me, and my brain gets stuck on it. This, I quite enjoyed, as a fellow night owl who has sometimes enjoyed the company of cricket chorus. This is buoyant, and fun to read. Glad to have come across it. :-)

I'm quite stoked that you took a liking to it. I think for most folks the sonnet is an acquired taste as the form is a challenge to master when initially dealing with it, but there are variants of it that ought to appeal to just about anybody. The payoff in its study, at least for myself, is in how it helps to hone my concept cohesion ability, which can manifest itself in other writings like essays or letter writing. I've gotten really hung up on it in the last few years. Fun fact; Romeo and Juliet's first kiss is done with a shared sonnet in their dialog.