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Anything But Spring
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seasons blur, mingled together
by the scattering of islands adrift
in providence
"providence he spat the word like some curse"
life has shown you get what you get
all that karma malarkey,
wonder what all the children getting bashed and raped
did wrong to the universe heh
we all need a little perspective sometimes
blunt perspective in the shape of a jug cord
or steel toed boot
yet he makes sense
or was it just rationalization of whiskey
beer and brutality
the world turns and here we are again
a little older a little more jaded by the way
it's all made, clichéd and degraded
first time poison
first time taking a direct hit
none of this second hand smoke
on the path to broke and broken
the family heirloom
of booze and bruises any drug that skims the edge off
pity is like an overzealous carpenter
takes more every time to plane the edges
to find the level
the house is bending and props
well they're just a make do aren't they......
autumn is here
its cool crisp air makes the skin feel alive
it rains colours but the walls don't melt
and the trees don't breathe
like they do in acid dreams
mind the screams
are they mine
mingled like some kind of mess
a child would concoct out of a cupboard
when you're so out of it you can't control your bladder
let alone look after a child
summer again
thoughts of rain long gone
less clothes though on the women folk
one night stands melt into puddles like ice
left on a bench along with all the dishes
growing mould cultures
because that is culture to the bottom rung
sing me a song, sung by the downtrodden
and I'm sure it'll contain anything but spring
because spring is the time the world
says go fourth and multiply
where the weather smiles
and fuck smiling it hurts my face
the past is like herpes sometimes
springs up on you when you least expect it
brings with it those weeping sores
maybe not providence
we all have to believe in something though.
seasons blur, mingled together
by the scattering of islands adrift
in providence
"providence he spat the word like some curse"
life has shown you get what you get
all that karma malarkey,
wonder what all the children getting bashed and raped
did wrong to the universe heh
we all need a little perspective sometimes
blunt perspective in the shape of a jug cord
or steel toed boot
yet he makes sense
or was it just rationalization of whiskey
beer and brutality
the world turns and here we are again
a little older a little more jaded by the way
it's all made, clichéd and degraded
first time poison
first time taking a direct hit
none of this second hand smoke
on the path to broke and broken
the family heirloom
of booze and bruises any drug that skims the edge off
pity is like an overzealous carpenter
takes more every time to plane the edges
to find the level
the house is bending and props
well they're just a make do aren't they......
autumn is here
its cool crisp air makes the skin feel alive
it rains colours but the walls don't melt
and the trees don't breathe
like they do in acid dreams
mind the screams
are they mine
mingled like some kind of mess
a child would concoct out of a cupboard
when you're so out of it you can't control your bladder
let alone look after a child
summer again
thoughts of rain long gone
less clothes though on the women folk
one night stands melt into puddles like ice
left on a bench along with all the dishes
growing mould cultures
because that is culture to the bottom rung
sing me a song, sung by the downtrodden
and I'm sure it'll contain anything but spring
because spring is the time the world
says go fourth and multiply
where the weather smiles
and fuck smiling it hurts my face
the past is like herpes sometimes
springs up on you when you least expect it
brings with it those weeping sores
maybe not providence
we all have to believe in something though.
Published 11th Jun 2022
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11th Jun 2022 7:36am
Good gawd anything like that cold air gold hair. Long gone, I am. This gave me a lot to think about. Sooo good poetry.
12th Jun 2022 7:18am
11th Jun 2022 8:14am
I really like the stream of consciousness vibe in this. Nothing is lost, for me, in places where one might otherwise add punctuation, it flows easily down the page, and I stumbled over nothing. Your imagery is interesting and striking, enough to make you go "Oooo" but you don't have to stop to ponder it in order to make sense of it, even though you may want to go back and read it again. I found these lines particularly compelling:
pity is like an overzealous carpenter
takes more every time to plane the edges
to find the level
the house is bending and props
well they're just a make do aren't they......
autumn is here
its cool crisp air makes the skin feel alive
it rains colours but the walls don't melt
and the trees don't breathe
like they do in acid dreams
Your ideas and your phrasing here.... best I have at the moment is goosebumpy, (blame the autumn air, I guess) so I hope it'll do. :-)
pity is like an overzealous carpenter
takes more every time to plane the edges
to find the level
the house is bending and props
well they're just a make do aren't they......
autumn is here
its cool crisp air makes the skin feel alive
it rains colours but the walls don't melt
and the trees don't breathe
like they do in acid dreams
Your ideas and your phrasing here.... best I have at the moment is goosebumpy, (blame the autumn air, I guess) so I hope it'll do. :-)
I’ll take goosebumpy hell if you’re taking the time to comment then I’ll take whatever you’re offering, (promise that doesn’t make me easy or cheap)….. who am I kidding 🤦♂️
Anonymous
- Edited 23rd May 2024 11:45am
12th Jun 2022 1:26am
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12th Jun 2022 7:18am
I think this piece needs a bit of that before running it down.
I like real and raw in my writing it’s grounding, no vapid shit,
How’d I do on the read through?
Or did you not listen?
Also reading list add
Really dig that thanks man
I like real and raw in my writing it’s grounding, no vapid shit,
How’d I do on the read through?
Or did you not listen?
Also reading list add
Really dig that thanks man
Anonymous
- Edited 23rd May 2024 11:45am
12th Jun 2022 11:09am
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