YOU  (for D. H.)  (6-23-03, while eating at 'The SPOT', along the seawall on  Galveston Island Texas)

this poem is
colorful like multicolor plastic straws
with artificial fruit flavoring
and neon tongue

i like it

Thank you so much for your very kind, most generous comment's feedback on this old 'love-sick' poem of mine asbr808 (Anthony R.)!  It's a surprisingly unexpected treat for me to read & hear you liked & enjoyed it, because ever since I first wrote it ( in the very same scene it describes), I myself never quite fully liked it & hesitated for quite a while, before I ever decided to go ahead & submit it here on DUP, because I doubted it's contents integrity & felt it read & sounded a bit too cheesy & sappy & ever since I first posted it here on DUP, back around 2013, I have long felt it is one of my weakest poems, perhaps due to the fact that I was seriously love-struck & obsessively consumed by what I fully felt & believed was my one true lifetime's one & only, forever Soul Mate & the ONE TRUE LOVE of my Life, but alas after 8 long, beautiful months of pure, ecstatic Live-Filled BLISS, things very suddenly went 'South', out of the blue I got a phone call from my new Love of my Life, in which he (in very few words) COLD-DUMPED me like worthless TRASH!!!...  So I'm sure that's why I've most likely had & held onto for all these many long years & decades ever since then (almost 23 years ago now!), my very mixed feelings & resentments about this old love-sick poem & have only been able to feel it's probably one of the most weak & mediocre at best, poems I've ever written!!!?!!!  But I still so very much appreciate & am surprised & genuinely Happy to hear, that You found something in it's content, story or form (???), which resonated in a much more positive light & way with you!  But I must tell you, that everything your text reply's most interestingly & creatively expressed  comments said to me about your impression of my poem, seemed to me to be more & better fitting & to more perfectly & precisely describe the crazy, wonderful, extremely colorful & highly visual imagery of your own text response comment's incredibly colorful description to me, than my old mediocre love-blinded poem!!!  Thanks again for your much appreciated comment's positive feedback asbr808 (Anthony!!!)😃👍🏻☀️😎

the day ends
with sun-set
in brilliant color
before the dark pallor
of nightfall.

this poem
like music from another room
emanated into my conscious
it is the frail-hot-sweet-dizzy  
sensation of love
that you captured

one of the best poems I've read on this site
you're welcome :]