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Canvas Dreams Of Tomorrow
Face to barrel of her 9mm pistol
He started to ramble rolling rhetoric
The heart chanting mantras of...
"May we not aim to change the men
Let us kill, to save the men
Charges are hereby dropped
you are assigned to full duty immediately
- the task is this...
Leave the streets with one less dead-body
we do or we die, and that's the life!
-Thank you for taking the time on me."
The essence of his life was sold
in the reflection of her Ray Bans
- the silver watch strap on her arm
yet he still sees his encore in
the shiny brass shell
As her majestic voice echoes
"Go to fucking hell"
Published 4th Apr 2022
| Edited 12th Apr 2022
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4th Apr 2022 9:57pm
Ah… the sweet treasure of that closing couplet. Lush.
Well, the women who swear, man… let me assure you… they always mean it. And they seem to be the most genuine. It’s like they’ve reached a peak where they’re just sick of everybody’s shit. Take it from me as a sailor mouth. 🤣
I must admit, this one took a few read throughs. And then I went away and came back to get a fresh perspective. The fact it’s tagged metaphor (I always look at the tags) suggests that there’s something going on here beyond surface level. I have my own interpretations… but I won’t go there just yet because they’re only my interpretations, heh.
Thank you for sharing number 5 :)
-M
Well, the women who swear, man… let me assure you… they always mean it. And they seem to be the most genuine. It’s like they’ve reached a peak where they’re just sick of everybody’s shit. Take it from me as a sailor mouth. 🤣
I must admit, this one took a few read throughs. And then I went away and came back to get a fresh perspective. The fact it’s tagged metaphor (I always look at the tags) suggests that there’s something going on here beyond surface level. I have my own interpretations… but I won’t go there just yet because they’re only my interpretations, heh.
Thank you for sharing number 5 :)
-M
5th Apr 2022 10:51am
hello you...
good to see you back! congrats on your writing stuff this week, they've been pure gold, I tell you!
this is very much a metaphor, I think I'll afford it a few edits, to get the words to slide off the reader better. yes it's very much intended to be the own interpretation of the reader. No right or wrong answers here!
I think sailor and mouth on women is a fantastic relationship... [lol] The world needs more of those!
thank you for putting eyes to it, and saying your say. Much appreciated!
till tomorrow
Al
good to see you back! congrats on your writing stuff this week, they've been pure gold, I tell you!
this is very much a metaphor, I think I'll afford it a few edits, to get the words to slide off the reader better. yes it's very much intended to be the own interpretation of the reader. No right or wrong answers here!
I think sailor and mouth on women is a fantastic relationship... [lol] The world needs more of those!
thank you for putting eyes to it, and saying your say. Much appreciated!
till tomorrow
Al
