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a hope for tomorrow.
In the tired morning
dark slowly beckons bluish
The promise'd day
looms
Just out of reach
Quiet mingles
amidst low ambient breaths
singing a background song
Forcing thoughts
like waves,
they pitch and roll—
battering such hidden places
Until you're there.
Washed up upon a rocky shore
of my precarious jagged ore
I am comforted
like I knew I would be
Allowing the shroud
of your memory
to bathe and rescue me
Today I willingly stay lost in you...
...there's always hope
for tomorrow.
Author's Note
A revision of an old poem that I attempted my first few months on DUP
© Blu2022
© Blu2022
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Re. a hope for tomorrow.
12th Mar 2022 3:00am
Dear BV,
Aaahhhh the romance behind, in front of and beside this longing is lovely. “ Allowing the shroud
of your memory
to bathe and rescue me” dripping with beautiful imagery and old world writing. Love what you’ve done with the piece (owning I never I read the original version although I’m sure that was outstanding also as you never put out drivel). Lovely write. H🌷
Aaahhhh the romance behind, in front of and beside this longing is lovely. “ Allowing the shroud
of your memory
to bathe and rescue me” dripping with beautiful imagery and old world writing. Love what you’ve done with the piece (owning I never I read the original version although I’m sure that was outstanding also as you never put out drivel). Lovely write. H🌷
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Re: Re. a hope for tomorrow.
12th Mar 2022 7:15am
Hey there, Honoria
Firstly, Omg, you're a super cutie, my dear lady!! I was so so excited to put a face with the carousel horse!!! Great pic on the NaPo forum!! Awww... I just loved it! ;p... ok ok– I won't make it any bigger of an issue, than that... Lol.
I'm so delighted you found this romantic and not too dreary. I was going for that middle ground and your lovely comments, are music to my ears. I'm humbly grateful for the generous list add and for you taking the time to leave your thoughts with me. I do love seeing you...
I hope you've been well - 💙
🌹 - B
x
Firstly, Omg, you're a super cutie, my dear lady!! I was so so excited to put a face with the carousel horse!!! Great pic on the NaPo forum!! Awww... I just loved it! ;p... ok ok– I won't make it any bigger of an issue, than that... Lol.
I'm so delighted you found this romantic and not too dreary. I was going for that middle ground and your lovely comments, are music to my ears. I'm humbly grateful for the generous list add and for you taking the time to leave your thoughts with me. I do love seeing you...
I hope you've been well - 💙
🌹 - B
x
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Re: Re. a hope for tomorrow.
12th Mar 2022 8:18am
T,
Thanks for the lovely sentiments and thoughtful insights. You really took the time to get inside my motivations, which you know that I adore. I more so saw myself as the jagged rocky ore that past memory washes against. Being saddled with memories from the past, be it of a person, place or thing, is oftentimes very bittersweet.
I'm glad I can still surprise and hopefully inspire.
I deeply thank you for the list add and for your understanding. I'm so happy you liked it.
Much gratitude, my friend 🙏
🌹 - 💙
B
Thanks for the lovely sentiments and thoughtful insights. You really took the time to get inside my motivations, which you know that I adore. I more so saw myself as the jagged rocky ore that past memory washes against. Being saddled with memories from the past, be it of a person, place or thing, is oftentimes very bittersweet.
I'm glad I can still surprise and hopefully inspire.
I deeply thank you for the list add and for your understanding. I'm so happy you liked it.
Much gratitude, my friend 🙏
🌹 - 💙
B
Re. a hope for tomorrow.
Lost in the passion of love ❤. Any guy including me wouldn't mind get lost in your eyes. Keep on writing you strong beautiful smart sexy woman.
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Re: Re. a hope for tomorrow.
12th Mar 2022 8:07am
Re. a hope for tomorrow.
12th Mar 2022 6:22am
I think its cool that you returned to this piece.
Strong metaphor...
Well established sense of place. Really engaged the senses.
I very much like applications of the tides.
This is quite brilliant, B.
Strong metaphor...
Well established sense of place. Really engaged the senses.
I very much like applications of the tides.
This is quite brilliant, B.
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Re. a hope for tomorrow.
12th Mar 2022 6:58am
Memories can be both staining and sustaining....best restraining and not constraining.
Hope is that half full step.
Hope is that half full step.
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Re: Re. a hope for tomorrow.
Nicely put, RT... Lovely thoughts.
Hope can also bite you in the ass sometimes, but that's just my jaded, pessimistic side spouting it's angst!
Thanks for taking a looksee. I always value what you have to say and I feel sincerely lucky that you kindly leave your thoughts with me.
🌹 - B
Hope can also bite you in the ass sometimes, but that's just my jaded, pessimistic side spouting it's angst!
Thanks for taking a looksee. I always value what you have to say and I feel sincerely lucky that you kindly leave your thoughts with me.
🌹 - B
Re: Re. a hope for tomorrow.
12th Mar 2022 7:18am
Yes, and sometimes a bite on the ass is just what the doctor ordered.
It doesn't seem like the worst outcome. It might be a preference if you don't resist butt rather embrace it.
It doesn't seem like the worst outcome. It might be a preference if you don't resist butt rather embrace it.
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Re: Re. a hope for tomorrow.
12th Mar 2022 8:05am
Lol... Ohh he's clever, this one is. 😉
Well, I definitely should heed doctors orders, so I'm not ass-ociated with bad judgment or
ass-umptions.
(I couldn't help myself)
;p
Well, I definitely should heed doctors orders, so I'm not ass-ociated with bad judgment or
ass-umptions.
(I couldn't help myself)
;p
Re: Re. a hope for tomorrow.
No need...put yourself out there on purpose. We learn very little from success. Once you win the gold medal....it's all downhill...unless you start all over...older.
Controlled disasters are when we try despite complications. We know, sorta, what we're getting into.
I was hormonally challenged from birth. My entire system was upside down. It so happened I got very ill and the doctor was clueless as to how to help me. I suggested testing everything, starting with my testosterone. Well, it was 129. Half of low normal. I was barely male. At 750, I had some recovery, but my emotions were a bundle of tears. I went back. No idea.
I called in a shaman to administer kambo, sacred frog medicine, to give me insight into my own biochemistry. Sure enough, I was able to clearly see the issue, another hormone...estrogen. Tested at a high 67, it was 12% above dangerous. I had been biochemically been doing the equivalent of ovulating for 40 years. Another mystery solved....panic attacks ceased. When I got that rebalanced later.
Okay. What to do? I researched the problem and found DIM, an estrogen lowering natural product and successfully used it to complete my hormonal reversal.
I felt, after a very miserable 2 years, the best I have ever felt. The entire reversal process took nearly ten years...because I was fumbling along.
I'm a happy Cat.
So, sometimes we can go off script, take charge, be bold, and find an alternative path. Oh, it bit my ass, back on topic, butt.....I can sit down as myself now.
Maybe you might challenge yourself. I find the thing that bothers us the most is the best area to tackle. That pain in the ass is what's biting us already. Be bold. You're working on your own behalf to be whole.
Controlled disasters are when we try despite complications. We know, sorta, what we're getting into.
I was hormonally challenged from birth. My entire system was upside down. It so happened I got very ill and the doctor was clueless as to how to help me. I suggested testing everything, starting with my testosterone. Well, it was 129. Half of low normal. I was barely male. At 750, I had some recovery, but my emotions were a bundle of tears. I went back. No idea.
I called in a shaman to administer kambo, sacred frog medicine, to give me insight into my own biochemistry. Sure enough, I was able to clearly see the issue, another hormone...estrogen. Tested at a high 67, it was 12% above dangerous. I had been biochemically been doing the equivalent of ovulating for 40 years. Another mystery solved....panic attacks ceased. When I got that rebalanced later.
Okay. What to do? I researched the problem and found DIM, an estrogen lowering natural product and successfully used it to complete my hormonal reversal.
I felt, after a very miserable 2 years, the best I have ever felt. The entire reversal process took nearly ten years...because I was fumbling along.
I'm a happy Cat.
So, sometimes we can go off script, take charge, be bold, and find an alternative path. Oh, it bit my ass, back on topic, butt.....I can sit down as myself now.
Maybe you might challenge yourself. I find the thing that bothers us the most is the best area to tackle. That pain in the ass is what's biting us already. Be bold. You're working on your own behalf to be whole.
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Re. a hope for tomorrow.
12th Mar 2022 3:13pm
What a delightful write... I love where this took me... there is a warm comfort to it.. hope wedded to longing... bravo B...
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Re: Re. a hope for tomorrow.
12th Mar 2022 3:37pm
Hey there, dear lady :)
I'm so relieved 😌 to see you back. I sincerely hope you had a nice break and are now fully recharged! They say that you don't know what you've got until it's gone, which I now know is totally proved true because of the way I missed your presence here with us. Your absence was deeply felt and I know that I, and I'm sure many, think you're a lovely sight for sore eyes.
Thank you for finding a bit of delight in reading my poem.... I'm so glad you came along with me...
Much love,
🌹-💙
B
I'm so relieved 😌 to see you back. I sincerely hope you had a nice break and are now fully recharged! They say that you don't know what you've got until it's gone, which I now know is totally proved true because of the way I missed your presence here with us. Your absence was deeply felt and I know that I, and I'm sure many, think you're a lovely sight for sore eyes.
Thank you for finding a bit of delight in reading my poem.... I'm so glad you came along with me...
Much love,
🌹-💙
B
Re. a hope for tomorrow.
12th Mar 2022 9:21pm
Yeah, I remember reading something like it, its new edition is fab as well wow! Kudos for that muse.!
Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
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Re: Re. a hope for tomorrow.
13th Mar 2022 3:19pm
Re. a hope for tomorrow.
13th Mar 2022 3:37pm
Let the baptism begin. Blushing!! : )
That someone who is your pilot light - igniting you.
That someone who is your pilot light - igniting you.
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Re: Re. a hope for tomorrow.
13th Mar 2022 6:37pm
Lol...I'd love to see you blush...Hmm the thoughts there 😏
Random flames finding their way to be oxygenated and when I least expect it...
Thank you for stopping by and for leaving me to ponder with huge 😁 grin attached...
🌹 - 💙
B
Random flames finding their way to be oxygenated and when I least expect it...
Thank you for stopping by and for leaving me to ponder with huge 😁 grin attached...
🌹 - 💙
B
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14th Mar 2022 6:55pm
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Re. a hope for tomorrow.
26th Mar 2022 3:41pm
Beautiful image of my favorite time of day. Time of contemplation often melancholy.
❣️🙏
❣️🙏
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