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Breakdown
Great day to have a meltdown
I can feel it coming on
Breakdown is coming
Break us down
Breaking now
Think it's time for a calmdown
Swallow those pills before you wreck it now
Breakdown is coming
Break us down
Breaking now
Stare through those walls and fall asleep
You're broken now
Breakdown is going
Breaking down
Broken now
I can feel it coming on
Breakdown is coming
Break us down
Breaking now
Think it's time for a calmdown
Swallow those pills before you wreck it now
Breakdown is coming
Break us down
Breaking now
Stare through those walls and fall asleep
You're broken now
Breakdown is going
Breaking down
Broken now
Published 9th Jan 2022
Author's Note
About a bad day
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9th Jan 2022 9:51pm
Sounds negative, but a positive and thoughtful message. Thanks and peace, (O)
9th Jan 2022 11:15pm
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- Edited 9th Apr 2022 5:45am
9th Jan 2022 11:08pm
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9th Jan 2022 11:16pm
10th Jan 2022 2:31am
I like how you structured this piece. It has a sort of manic feel to it, an urgency. But it's juxtaposed by an underlying sadness that keeps the pace a little slower. A couple of reads to let it sink in. Nicely done.
10th Jan 2022 2:33am
