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Untitled # 1
Somewhere
Buried deep inside
Hides the man that once was
The man he was before …
Before
The sand
The blood
And
The hate
Tried to kill him
But they failed
Kinda
He survived
But will likely
Never be the same
This is the cost
The cost of living
Living knowing
That the only reason
He walks this earth
And breathes
Is because
There is other men
That no longer do
Buried deep inside
Hides the man that once was
The man he was before …
Before
The sand
The blood
And
The hate
Tried to kill him
But they failed
Kinda
He survived
But will likely
Never be the same
This is the cost
The cost of living
Living knowing
That the only reason
He walks this earth
And breathes
Is because
There is other men
That no longer do
Written by
Wh1skeySwagger
(Swagger)
Published 2nd Jan 2022
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Re. Untitled # 1
Dear Swagger,
Your open honesty is a kind of truth that most humans won't ever experience and won't ever be able to fully fathom. Your piece allows for bettering that understanding. I also think that your poem can be of special meaning and help to anyone who's suffered (or is suffering) from PTSD; benefiting them by knowing that they're not alone and that the outlet of writing can potentially help in efforts at their healing... I applaud your bravery and I deeply hope you continue to share with us, my friend 🙏🏻
I wish you nothing but all the very best in the new year ahead - 💙
Much love and respect,
🌹 - B
xoxo
Your open honesty is a kind of truth that most humans won't ever experience and won't ever be able to fully fathom. Your piece allows for bettering that understanding. I also think that your poem can be of special meaning and help to anyone who's suffered (or is suffering) from PTSD; benefiting them by knowing that they're not alone and that the outlet of writing can potentially help in efforts at their healing... I applaud your bravery and I deeply hope you continue to share with us, my friend 🙏🏻
I wish you nothing but all the very best in the new year ahead - 💙
Much love and respect,
🌹 - B
xoxo
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5th Jan 2022 11:49pm
Thank you so much for your kind words and encouragement blue. Your insight is always appreciated
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2nd Jan 2022 10:54pm
Hello S
Not sure what to say, this is a really powerful poem, I read it several times. Very evocative, it's like a foreward in a book you're about to read.
Thanks for sharing it,
Not sure what to say, this is a really powerful poem, I read it several times. Very evocative, it's like a foreward in a book you're about to read.
Thanks for sharing it,
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5th Jan 2022 11:51pm
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18th Jan 2022 6:00am
I see what you tried to do here. It seems that some poems just don't need a title and the words inside the piece can hold their own weight.
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20th Jan 2022 8:59am
Thank you for reading and commenting. Honestly i wrote it and it sat for a few days because i could not come up with something worthy of the feeling. so i went with what i saved in the initial draft
Thank you again
WS
Thank you again
WS
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Anonymous
22nd Mar 2022 11:39pm
I love these little insightful pieces that offer so much hope to the human situation. It’s a very uplifting piece that I believe should be on every man’s wall.
Thank you for sharing this
-M
Thank you for sharing this
-M
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22nd Mar 2022 11:48pm
NS
Thank you so much for your kind words and encouragement. Know that brought a smile onto this guys face
Thanks again for taking the time to read me and for providing feedback
WS
Thank you so much for your kind words and encouragement. Know that brought a smile onto this guys face
Thanks again for taking the time to read me and for providing feedback
WS
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22nd Mar 2022 11:48pm
M
Thank you so much for your kind words and encouragement. Know that brought a smile onto this guys face
Thanks again for taking the time to read me and for providing feedback
WS
Thank you so much for your kind words and encouragement. Know that brought a smile onto this guys face
Thanks again for taking the time to read me and for providing feedback
WS
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11th Apr 2022 11:20am
Glad to find your poetry. This was a raw and honest look at the costs of war and made me quiet. Well done!
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13th Apr 2022 9:03am