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Silent Whispers
she enjoyed
her last breath
soaking up
the scent
of stale smoke
and regret
silence fills
her whispers
as the shadows
of her soul
dance upon
her naked flesh
the ticking
of the clock
takes her quietly
into the darkness
where secrets fill
her burning lungs
and she can scream
deeply
into her dreams
her last breath
soaking up
the scent
of stale smoke
and regret
silence fills
her whispers
as the shadows
of her soul
dance upon
her naked flesh
the ticking
of the clock
takes her quietly
into the darkness
where secrets fill
her burning lungs
and she can scream
deeply
into her dreams
Published 25th Dec 2021
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25th Dec 2021 4:58am
25th Dec 2021 6:18am
Wow. This was a traumatic read. "the scent of stale smoke and regret" is such an amazing line.
25th Dec 2021 12:10pm
25th Dec 2021 5:34pm
Hey Journey……..beautiful soothing ink……luv this……hopeful whispering dreams I luv to have…….purple luv & hugs xo :)
25th Dec 2021 6:19pm
25th Dec 2021 5:44pm
Dear J,
For me, this is an interesting mix of anxious and sweet relief that appeals to my dark side. The idea of a final breath of something that was once pleasurable and then getting to scream…the ultimate in releasing frustrations. I think your formatting and quick style have such a great way of creating a story line that resolves yet leaves the reader with wanting more. Great piece. H🌷
For me, this is an interesting mix of anxious and sweet relief that appeals to my dark side. The idea of a final breath of something that was once pleasurable and then getting to scream…the ultimate in releasing frustrations. I think your formatting and quick style have such a great way of creating a story line that resolves yet leaves the reader with wanting more. Great piece. H🌷
25th Dec 2021 6:21pm
Dear H,
You are so wonderful and lovely. Thank you for such a kind and thoughtful comment.
I hope you are well.
Always,
J
You are so wonderful and lovely. Thank you for such a kind and thoughtful comment.
I hope you are well.
Always,
J
25th Dec 2021 10:11pm
26th Dec 2021 00:09am
26th Dec 2021 9:36pm
I find a backrub helps her a lot.
Ah, the mind and sleep - Sleep provides the brain free rein to get into all kinds of mischief. Your poem captures the darkness of anxiety.
Ah, the mind and sleep - Sleep provides the brain free rein to get into all kinds of mischief. Your poem captures the darkness of anxiety.
2nd Jan 2022 1:45am
Hello I am new here and I like your writings! This one also captures some hidden "feelings". Great piece!
