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An Observation
I watch his cock advance and, then, retreat
And feel my lips connect with every move
He makes. I hear groaned pleasure, as his meat
Enjoys my passive offer, while I sooth
His need with flat of tongue, that lies beneath
The shaft that he's pushed in. Alacrity
Is just a word that comes to mind. The sheath
(my mouth) elicits his harsh empathy,
By being pressed in place, so that his balls
Can brush against my chin; when his cock swells,
Finding the throat so tight, it just enthralls;
As much as seeing cock-shape, while it dwells
And fills my narrow gullet where he's splashed
Before and will, again, quite unabashed
And feel my lips connect with every move
He makes. I hear groaned pleasure, as his meat
Enjoys my passive offer, while I sooth
His need with flat of tongue, that lies beneath
The shaft that he's pushed in. Alacrity
Is just a word that comes to mind. The sheath
(my mouth) elicits his harsh empathy,
By being pressed in place, so that his balls
Can brush against my chin; when his cock swells,
Finding the throat so tight, it just enthralls;
As much as seeing cock-shape, while it dwells
And fills my narrow gullet where he's splashed
Before and will, again, quite unabashed
Author's Note
Copyright of @SweetOblivion 12/21 if you care about such things (which I kind of do)
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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14th Dec 2021 4:13pm
I do love a good rhyme, especially one that has a tangible effect....great stuff. L
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14th Dec 2021 5:22pm
You certainly have an eye for detail. Must come with experience?
Nicely penned.
Nicely penned.
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24th Dec 2021 2:34pm
Graphic erotic poetry really isn't my thing, but you clearly have a knack for it. I like how your work in its way seems to appeal to multiple persuasions. I'm a gay man, and I got something out of this poem.
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24th Dec 2021 2:48pm
I try to write about my own experiences and feelings but I agree both are to a degree transferable.