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My Pain
He says he's different, that he's not like other guys
please lets try he tells me
a hug and a kiss he knows me so well
yes i say, but please don't break me
and his eyes answer my plea
I feel pain, so much pain
i die inside
he sprawls on top of me
he whispers I love you
im panting im in so much pain
i cant speak
the pain stops hes done
then he gets up and leaves me
leaves me naked on the grass
he lied
he broke me
he broke my heart
-DangerousDesires
please lets try he tells me
a hug and a kiss he knows me so well
yes i say, but please don't break me
and his eyes answer my plea
I feel pain, so much pain
i die inside
he sprawls on top of me
he whispers I love you
im panting im in so much pain
i cant speak
the pain stops hes done
then he gets up and leaves me
leaves me naked on the grass
he lied
he broke me
he broke my heart
-DangerousDesires
Written by
dangerousdesires
(TheVoicesAreWatching)
Published 6th Mar 2012
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oh
6th Mar 2012 8:20pm
I just Can't believe no one has Commented on this poem..... What you have just written was Legendary.. The fact of pain was layed out... No other word would even come close to yours... Not everybody can write this kind of pain.. You have to be born with it.. The best poem I readed in long time.................................
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re: oh
6th Mar 2012 8:29pm
Thank you; I appreciate it... He really did break me and I wrote what I felt
Sad sad sad
10th Mar 2012 00:57am
Very tragic poem, beautifully written though so thanks for sharing. You do an excellent job at portraying your pain at his hands...well done and welcome to DU! x x
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10th Mar 2012 1:19am
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10th Mar 2012 1:37am
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10th Mar 2012 7:34pm
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10th Mar 2012 9:26pm
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1st Apr 2012 7:37pm
I am not one to usually put somehting like this on a poem of someone whom I really dont know quite yet..but i'm going to anyways..I'm sorry if this is not a work of fiction..I absoulutely loved this poem though..It kinda makes me re-live some things..Very well put..
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2nd Apr 2012 3:17am
Yes I only wish this was a work of fiction, I am glad you can comment on my work, I am so very glad to all of your kind words.
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12th May 2016 6:50am
Anonymous
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31st Mar 2019 6:10am
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