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With the crisp air against my face, gathering my coat tighter, hands in fuzzy warm gloves, I secure my cocoon
I follow the low clouds trailing the grey park, reminiscent of a dream-scene in a black and white movie
Color and any signs of living nature are not on stage, only solemn and muted tones surround me
Dense mist and darkness brings me into a dream state
I summon you in my mind, already knowing you are there somewhere hiding in the fog
Waiting for me
I know you have been watching me,
and I like it
Secretly, you have been protecting me, outwardly acting gruff and disinterested
We have been actors, rehearsing emotions, but now the truth must be exposed
You cannot hide your true feelings and you cannot hide here, I know you will not
I am the starlet in this real life black and white romance, slowly walking, waiting for the moment when you approach
I see you, your silhouette, your long dark coat, my stare confirms my desires for you
The warmth of your breath touches upon my lips as you begin to kiss me
Pulling me in closer, feeling your heat has made the crisp air lose its effect on me
My coat unbuttoned and my breast exposed, your suction weakens me
Slowly you reach down and your hand penetrates me
Privately our intimacy is shielded, skillfully bonding with me under your chrysalis,
you transform me
We blend in with the grey, and our breath joins the rolling fog, we belong to the scene
You whisper that you have always been the director and you control the climax
…Fade to black
I follow the low clouds trailing the grey park, reminiscent of a dream-scene in a black and white movie
Color and any signs of living nature are not on stage, only solemn and muted tones surround me
Dense mist and darkness brings me into a dream state
I summon you in my mind, already knowing you are there somewhere hiding in the fog
Waiting for me
I know you have been watching me,
and I like it
Secretly, you have been protecting me, outwardly acting gruff and disinterested
We have been actors, rehearsing emotions, but now the truth must be exposed
You cannot hide your true feelings and you cannot hide here, I know you will not
I am the starlet in this real life black and white romance, slowly walking, waiting for the moment when you approach
I see you, your silhouette, your long dark coat, my stare confirms my desires for you
The warmth of your breath touches upon my lips as you begin to kiss me
Pulling me in closer, feeling your heat has made the crisp air lose its effect on me
My coat unbuttoned and my breast exposed, your suction weakens me
Slowly you reach down and your hand penetrates me
Privately our intimacy is shielded, skillfully bonding with me under your chrysalis,
you transform me
We blend in with the grey, and our breath joins the rolling fog, we belong to the scene
You whisper that you have always been the director and you control the climax
…Fade to black
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Dear NG,
Exciting, anticipatory, hot passion. This write has it all. Love the director cuts. Adore black and white. And the picture lends itself perfectly. Applause. Standing O. (That’s O for ovation. 😉)
Great write. H🌷
Exciting, anticipatory, hot passion. This write has it all. Love the director cuts. Adore black and white. And the picture lends itself perfectly. Applause. Standing O. (That’s O for ovation. 😉)
Great write. H🌷
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Honoria🌷
I am laughing at the O clarification, so funny!
Thank you for the beautiful words, for the RL and standing O 💝
NG 🌹
I am laughing at the O clarification, so funny!
Thank you for the beautiful words, for the RL and standing O 💝
NG 🌹
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26th Oct 2021 00:50am
Great write, so sexy, awesome I played that in my head like a black and white movie.
Loved it
Love and light
Ron x
Loved it
Love and light
Ron x
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Being transformed within a chrysalis of passion will haunt my desires for a long time.
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26th Oct 2021 8:38pm
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Thank you for my poem, we are in each other's hearts and minds, all the time, soulmate . YWKISA xx Nyx 💛💙l love u❤❤❤ sink those teeth into me, bite me hard xx
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27th Oct 2021 5:23pm
MWKISA, you have exposed us! 😁💙💛
I have left the first set of bite marks ❤️
Nyx xx
I have left the first set of bite marks ❤️
Nyx xx
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27th Oct 2021 5:54am
What a well written piece of fine literature. The depiction is excellent with out the need for torrid unsavory definition to push points unnecessary to describe. Your abilities are astounding. I am very fortunate you allow us to access your thoughts and Prowess. I look forward to future posts.
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27th Oct 2021 5:34pm
I bow to your comment, “literature!”
I hope someday!
And, as to the rest of your amazing compliments, I can only give a modest, but ever so appreciative, thank you!
NG 🌹
I hope someday!
And, as to the rest of your amazing compliments, I can only give a modest, but ever so appreciative, thank you!
NG 🌹
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29th Oct 2021 5:13am
Captivating in that I was anticipating a much darker ending. Curiosity was at an all time high.
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29th Oct 2021 1:15pm
I’m so happy this captivated you and grabbed your curiosity! I was thinking to push the ending a little more but finally just revealed “him” as the one in control.
Your review is helpful
Thank you 🌹
Your review is helpful
Thank you 🌹
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Anonymous
30th Oct 2021 2:11am
What I enjoy, that moves me:
the relationship between the man and the woman as geography & meteorology--
especially the masculine fog; diffuse, as opposed to hard and unyielding--
the use of the word "suction" as a force lending stability--like Nosferatu's bony fingers clasping Mina's heart / life essence, holding her up at the end of the film;
And that' it's this diffusion, the male, that directs--
Lots to enjoy!
the relationship between the man and the woman as geography & meteorology--
especially the masculine fog; diffuse, as opposed to hard and unyielding--
the use of the word "suction" as a force lending stability--like Nosferatu's bony fingers clasping Mina's heart / life essence, holding her up at the end of the film;
And that' it's this diffusion, the male, that directs--
Lots to enjoy!
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30th Oct 2021 6:03pm
Hello Mark, not just with my work but all your comments offer such unique insights and perspectives of which I truly appreciate.
Regarding the outcome of this poem, yes I wanted the feminine to realize that she was never in control (of any of it).
I’m glad you found a lot to enjoy in this!
Thank you! 🌹
Regarding the outcome of this poem, yes I wanted the feminine to realize that she was never in control (of any of it).
I’m glad you found a lot to enjoy in this!
Thank you! 🌹
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A sense of voyeurism and Dominance jumps out at me
Coupled with your beautiful photograph
Exquisitely told
Temperature is rising here ...
BIG LIKE
RL AWARD
Coupled with your beautiful photograph
Exquisitely told
Temperature is rising here ...
BIG LIKE
RL AWARD
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31st Oct 2021 8:47am
Yes, interesting…perhaps the thrill of voyeurism even if hiding under coats and definitely dominance. “Exquisitely told” is wonderful to hear, thank you!
Thank you for the BL&RLA💝
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Thank you for the BL&RLA💝
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1st Nov 2021 10:43pm
as the secdution begaians the crama is rolling then all hear cut thats a wrap pointing at you come tell me more
well done
well done
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1st Nov 2021 10:48pm
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Your first set of bite marks leaves me with orgasmic blood running through my veins,deep into my heart, mind and soul. Now l know you do have magical powers and that orgasmic blood is in your heart and running through your veins, down to your swollen secret place, taking you to heaven, tantric dream. Feel my orgasmic bliss inside you. And...action . xx YWKISA xx Nyx 💛💙
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And now brace yourself for the second bite, or perhaps I should brace myself MWKISA xx
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10th Nov 2021 5:09am
Wonderfully sexy poem, and great photography to go with it.
I enjoyed your description of the setting…the somewhat mysterious character and the beautifully written description of their erotic love making. Nice work!
I enjoyed your description of the setting…the somewhat mysterious character and the beautifully written description of their erotic love making. Nice work!
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10th Nov 2021 1:30pm
Nice to meet you and thank you so much for reading and for the beautiful comments! 🌹
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13th Nov 2021 1:50am
I liked this 😉
Very inticing journey you take the reader on. Very hot and still very poetic. Great work!
Very inticing journey you take the reader on. Very hot and still very poetic. Great work!
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13th Nov 2021 2:04am
I’m glad you enjoyed the enticing journey, and I appreciate your observation about the poetic aspect being kept! Thank you! 🌹
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Ooh yes the mystery! I’m glad you enjoyed that! When I took the photo, the nice familiar park turned mysterious! I couldn’t see the paths anymore. Thank you for your all your support! I appreciate it very much! 🌹
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24th Nov 2021 4:28am
Hello,
Dream, imagination, sensation and playfulness with the notion of love. I like the theme and then again rolling in the fog.
KS
Dream, imagination, sensation and playfulness with the notion of love. I like the theme and then again rolling in the fog.
KS
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22nd Jul 2022 3:35am
U are a hot sexy gurl, woaw, want the eyes n lips and hair on my body, coy shy gurl
u shud be like the blonde poetess that writing about gym
bet u are a nasty gurl in bed and should write about it
Mr snags would like you, slut eyes on doll face
u shud be like the blonde poetess that writing about gym
bet u are a nasty gurl in bed and should write about it
Mr snags would like you, slut eyes on doll face
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22nd Jul 2022 4:15am
Hello,
This is an interesting read. I write poems in the same way where the partner vanishes or fizzles out in air, fog or snow and clouds. I love your photography.
Love,
KS
This is an interesting read. I write poems in the same way where the partner vanishes or fizzles out in air, fog or snow and clouds. I love your photography.
Love,
KS
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22nd Jul 2022 4:23am
Thank you KS! I was just signing off and it’s so nice to see your comment. Thank you for that! 🌹
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1st Dec 2022 8:57pm
Amazing 👏 your love for your craft is very brilliant with a touch of excellence queen 👸 please 🙏 keep on writing ✍ ok peace ✌ and blessings 🙏 always 💖
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5th Feb 2023 00:45am
Very skilled, great lay out to the piece building up to the erotica is key, tight work Lady
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