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Element(s)
I found you
in the darkness
of the night
as the clock ticks
in the quietness
of my mind
where my thoughts
are the very loudest
I found you
in the depths
of our words
each letter knowing
every syllable falling
finding comfort
in the sweet silence
between the periods
catching our breath
at the commas
and holding on
through the parentheses
I found you
in the lucid ink
of my pen
that scatters across
this blank canvas
I found you
in the element(s)
that trickle through my veins
and into my heart
in the darkness
of the night
as the clock ticks
in the quietness
of my mind
where my thoughts
are the very loudest
I found you
in the depths
of our words
each letter knowing
every syllable falling
finding comfort
in the sweet silence
between the periods
catching our breath
at the commas
and holding on
through the parentheses
I found you
in the lucid ink
of my pen
that scatters across
this blank canvas
I found you
in the element(s)
that trickle through my veins
and into my heart
Written by
journeychase
(Journey)
Published 1st Oct 2021
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1st Oct 2021 8:02pm
I love the potential.... the hope .... the intensity of 'finding'.... and the repetition which works so well, accenting the emotion .... awesome, crisp clever word choices.... it feels slightly whimsical or maybe there's little bit of a dreamy aspect...
You're a fantastic writer and we're lucky to have you here with us.
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Another really wonderful read
🌹 - B
You're a fantastic writer and we're lucky to have you here with us.
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Another really wonderful read
🌹 - B
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1st Oct 2021 8:05pm
Aww B!! Thank you! YOU are such a treasure here upon my page. So lovely to always see you.
Dreamy indeed, thank you for your sweet words,
:-)
Dreamy indeed, thank you for your sweet words,
:-)
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1st Oct 2021 8:21pm
Great flow ... crisp line breaks ... deep and resonating theme ... well penned ...
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