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half an hour before sunset
Published 22nd Sep 2021
Author's Note
“A poem should have the touch ... the way sunlight falls on Braille.” .......silent lotus
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22nd Sep 2021 6:15pm
Dear SL,
I’m not quite sure I understand what your intended thoughts were behind this write. I did enjoy each phrase on its own as mini vignettes and snippets of experiences. No broccoli on the menu caught me off guard and caused a bit of a guffaw 😊.
Your poems do evoke many feelings of calm and humor. H🌷
I’m not quite sure I understand what your intended thoughts were behind this write. I did enjoy each phrase on its own as mini vignettes and snippets of experiences. No broccoli on the menu caught me off guard and caused a bit of a guffaw 😊.
Your poems do evoke many feelings of calm and humor. H🌷
23rd Sep 2021 1:00pm
dear Honoria
it is interesting what grabs our attention
be it as large as a billboard or as small as a ladybug
that awakens us to the ephemeral essence
some moments of awakening are shared
some alone
a warm smile
silent lotus
~
it is interesting what grabs our attention
be it as large as a billboard or as small as a ladybug
that awakens us to the ephemeral essence
some moments of awakening are shared
some alone
a warm smile
silent lotus
~
24th Sep 2021 10:58am
28th Sep 2021 4:21pm
I find your formatting so awesome. I want to just stare at it. :) I guess to many people were asking about broccoli lol but this is one of my favorite lines 'no one... knows why...'. Sometimes you just have to contemplate the meaning and that's part of the fun. Lovely image of a lady bug! Perhaps it's waiting for an answer too. Anyway, loved this!
