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APPRECIATION
APPRECIATION
Blooming flower, what's your choice
which bestirs your heart to live?
It's the butterfly that roams
all the fields and lands on me.
It has seen the flowers all
which are noble in their hues
and possess most charming scents;
once approached, no one can leave.
They have winked to it invite.
It's perceived their lures and smells.
It's neglected their warm calls,
choosing what its heart adores.
You've implored your Lord for rain,
which endows your green and red
purest colours which you need
to receive what gives you worth.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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Blooming flower, what's your choice
which bestirs your heart to live?
It's the butterfly that roams
all the fields and lands on me.
It has seen the flowers all
which are noble in their hues
and possess most charming scents;
once approached, no one can leave.
They have winked to it invite.
It's perceived their lures and smells.
It's neglected their warm calls,
choosing what its heart adores.
You've implored your Lord for rain,
which endows your green and red
purest colours which you need
to receive what gives you worth.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
____________________________________
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Published 1st Sep 2021
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"It has seen the flowers all
which are noble in their hues
and possess most charming scents;
once approached, no one can leave."
I thought you said that the butterfly roams from field to field. But if, as you say, a flower renders those that approach it unable to leave it , how can what you say the butterfly does be true?
BTW, is the beauty of a flower and how that flower thrives really a great subject?
And have you used "endow" correctly? Doesn't it need the word "with" to ensure that your line doesn't contain a solecism, let alone, given the primary meaning of "endow, an absurdity?
You've implored your Lord for rain,
which endows your green and red [green and red what?]
WITH purest colours which you need
to receive what gives you worth.
endow
Verb
(transitive, archaic or obsolete) To provide with a dower (“the portion that a widow receives from her deceased husband's property”) or a dowry (“property given to a bride”).
(transitive) To give property to (someone) as a gift; specifically, to provide (a person or institution) with support in the form of a permanent fund of money or other benefits.
(transitive) **Followed by with, or rarely by of:** to enrich or furnish with some faculty or quality.
Synonym: begift
(transitive) Usually in the passive: to naturally furnish (with something).
Synonyms: bless, gift
She was endowed with a beautiful voice.
https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/endow
endow
From Longman Dictionary of Contemporary English
en‧dow /ɪnˈdaʊ/ verb [transitive]
to give a college, hospital etc a large sum of money that provides it with an income
→ endow somebody/something **with** something
https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/endow
which are noble in their hues
and possess most charming scents;
once approached, no one can leave."
I thought you said that the butterfly roams from field to field. But if, as you say, a flower renders those that approach it unable to leave it , how can what you say the butterfly does be true?
BTW, is the beauty of a flower and how that flower thrives really a great subject?
And have you used "endow" correctly? Doesn't it need the word "with" to ensure that your line doesn't contain a solecism, let alone, given the primary meaning of "endow, an absurdity?
You've implored your Lord for rain,
which endows your green and red [green and red what?]
WITH purest colours which you need
to receive what gives you worth.
endow
Verb
(transitive, archaic or obsolete) To provide with a dower (“the portion that a widow receives from her deceased husband's property”) or a dowry (“property given to a bride”).
(transitive) To give property to (someone) as a gift; specifically, to provide (a person or institution) with support in the form of a permanent fund of money or other benefits.
(transitive) **Followed by with, or rarely by of:** to enrich or furnish with some faculty or quality.
Synonym: begift
(transitive) Usually in the passive: to naturally furnish (with something).
Synonyms: bless, gift
She was endowed with a beautiful voice.
https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/endow
endow
From Longman Dictionary of Contemporary English
en‧dow /ɪnˈdaʊ/ verb [transitive]
to give a college, hospital etc a large sum of money that provides it with an income
→ endow somebody/something **with** something
https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/endow
Anonymous
2nd Sep 2021 7:19am
Love.
What's to love about this piece? It contains statements that contradict one another, the promise in the title that the text will speak about "appreciation" is not fulfilled, words within it are misused, and the anthropomorphizing of the flower, let alone that it knows it has a lord who/that can be petitioned, is absurd.
2nd Sep 2021 2:16pm
He's an image of a butterfly.
https://cdn.mos.cms.futurecdn.net/MutKXr3Z2za46Zdi3XM3BM-1200-80.jpg
I wonder if you are up to composing an ekphrastic poem about it?
https://cdn.mos.cms.futurecdn.net/MutKXr3Z2za46Zdi3XM3BM-1200-80.jpg
I wonder if you are up to composing an ekphrastic poem about it?
"They have winked to it invite."
Leaving aside the fact that flowers cannot wink at anything (nor can butterflies since they have no eyelids), this is a strange, if not also a poorly written assertion, especially If you intended "invite" to be read as a noun. Grammatically , it is a solecism since it lacks the "an" that you should have placed before "invite" for the sentence to make sense. Moreover, you should have noted something about what the invitation was to.
Leaving aside the fact that flowers cannot wink at anything (nor can butterflies since they have no eyelids), this is a strange, if not also a poorly written assertion, especially If you intended "invite" to be read as a noun. Grammatically , it is a solecism since it lacks the "an" that you should have placed before "invite" for the sentence to make sense. Moreover, you should have noted something about what the invitation was to.
2nd Sep 2021 6:50pm
Thank you very much, very dear Em-ily, for your interest, which l highly appreciate.
3rd Sep 2021 1:18pm
Is it because
a butterfly came once
to visit me
that I’m alive
in fulsome bloom
or actually
because the sun and rain
and nutrients
drawn from the earth
(potassium and nitrogen,
and phosphorous)
have done their job
in seeing that I thrive?
The strange and witless claim
that’s posted by a fellow who
apparently
knows little botany
that I’m possessed
by hot desires for monarchs
and their kith
if I’m to grow
and come into my own
now makes me laugh so much
that if I could,
I’d pith
(forgive my lisp).
a butterfly came once
to visit me
that I’m alive
in fulsome bloom
or actually
because the sun and rain
and nutrients
drawn from the earth
(potassium and nitrogen,
and phosphorous)
have done their job
in seeing that I thrive?
The strange and witless claim
that’s posted by a fellow who
apparently
knows little botany
that I’m possessed
by hot desires for monarchs
and their kith
if I’m to grow
and come into my own
now makes me laugh so much
that if I could,
I’d pith
(forgive my lisp).
