Family Tree

LIke the structure of this ... the flow is wonderful ... great line breaks ... there is a haunting sadness that stayed with me after reading the last line and its stark punctuation.

@LilDragonFly thank you for your comment. It is so easy to be haunted by our past, attached in ways to our family that we may not choose and here it is, all of our ancestry living in us, with us, through us.
warmly,
ursa 💜

The echo effect of the last lines really punctuate this piece, perfectly.. in my opinion....
The sense of melancholy, is truly palpable...


Excellent work, Ursa
Ty for sharing this with us
🌹 - B

thank you Blue, sincerely appreciate you stopping by, and for your kind comment. Hope you have been well.
warmly, ursa.

Just a beautiful poem, Ursa...the melancholic feel runs thru each line. Bravo!

Cheers...Harry

Harry, thank you for your kind words. I appreciate you sharing your thoughts here.
lots of love, ursa

Dear U,

I don’t think we fully know how much past generations, people we don’t even know, have affected our lives. It’s wild when it’s realized and overwhelming. I think this poem is astounding. I love the ending because to me, we can run but we can not hide. Great write. H🌷

Dear H,
So true. We are who we are. What will we do with what we have is the beautiful question here. But so true that this can happen only when the overwhelm settles.
Thank you for your kind comment. Hope you are well.
warmly,
ursa 💜 💜

Very enjoyable--
the simple, clear, concise method of the narrative allows the poem to unfold in the reader's mind--
the subtext isn't forced, but comes through gradually, and for that, more effectively--
great line about "deep color--very evocative!
nice refrain, "picks and she eats"--
suggests much, without getting bogged down--
Towards the end of the poem, I'm wondering, "how many did she eat?" "cores? as in, like multiple apples? she must have been up there a while"

I guess toward the end of the poem the narrative baggage starts to weigh me down:  I'm imagining so many things--the orchard, the time spent in the tree, then...the ocean...and I'm wondering about the age of the female in the tree...It gets difficult for me to feel in any sense grounded in the narrative & situation I took as real.
There's so much here to like!
Enjoyed!

Hello Mark,
Thank you for taking the time to offer a detailed comment here. Sincerely appreciate you sharing your impressions; helpful to see different perspectives about my writing.
Hope that you are keeping well.
warmly,
ursa