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Mambo #5
the end of a well-worn path
...always?
seems to arrive unexpectedly
~ never mind you’ve been waiting,
watching in slow motion
its march across the horizon
inch by excruciating mile,
~never mind it should feel
familiar by now;
the moment shows up unannounced,
scratching fresh paint from the door,
lost and unmoored, overflowing
empty hands deprived of everything
you once offered;
stale breath overfills these lungs
spilling out in mumbled curses ~
one by one, they tumble headlong
into the silence that’s settling
deep into my bones;
lines that separate you from me
feel drawn in permanent marker
...always?
seems to arrive unexpectedly
~ never mind you’ve been waiting,
watching in slow motion
its march across the horizon
inch by excruciating mile,
~never mind it should feel
familiar by now;
the moment shows up unannounced,
scratching fresh paint from the door,
lost and unmoored, overflowing
empty hands deprived of everything
you once offered;
stale breath overfills these lungs
spilling out in mumbled curses ~
one by one, they tumble headlong
into the silence that’s settling
deep into my bones;
lines that separate you from me
feel drawn in permanent marker
Published 15th Jun 2021
Author's Note
Written for the Underground Elegy competition
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15th Jun 2021 5:39pm
15th Jun 2021 9:10pm
16th Jun 2021 9:13am
I enjoyed reading your poem Luna.
"you once offered;
stale breath overfills these lungs
spilling out in mumbled curses ~ "
that's too cool.
"you once offered;
stale breath overfills these lungs
spilling out in mumbled curses ~ "
that's too cool.
16th Jun 2021 3:03pm
16th Jun 2021 3:25pm
Dear L,
I very much enjoyed and was extremely impressed by the contrary images you so brilliantly expressed throughout the poem.
“ overflowing
empty hands deprived of everything”
“ inch by excruciating mile”
These phrases create such a great sense of vast and painful voids for me. Rather like my dreams where I’m stuck in cement and screaming underwater for help.
Great write and wishing you all the best in the comp. H🌷
I very much enjoyed and was extremely impressed by the contrary images you so brilliantly expressed throughout the poem.
“ overflowing
empty hands deprived of everything”
“ inch by excruciating mile”
These phrases create such a great sense of vast and painful voids for me. Rather like my dreams where I’m stuck in cement and screaming underwater for help.
Great write and wishing you all the best in the comp. H🌷
18th Jun 2021 9:16pm
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17th Jun 2021 1:09am
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18th Jun 2021 9:16pm
19th Jun 2021 9:48pm
20th Jul 2021 6:05am
Loved the flowing motion through this, like beautiful melancholy wrapped and released into the universe.
Good luck in the comp.
Good luck in the comp.
20th Jul 2021 5:55pm
