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Bizarre Puzzle
I collect a bizarre puzzle from your views and words,
Between us - time and the abyss. And, probably, love ...
To pinch my hand, or something, it's time to wake up ...
I believe in good to much, I am so charmingly blind
In your eyes I was frantically looking for traces of us,
Or maybe it was just a chill that has already passed? ..
The next summer will come, declaring its rights
When will all this be forgotten and decay to dust? ..
So many countries, kilometers, spaces ... Tired of counting
And not a single miserable corner where you could hug me ...
Between us - time and the abyss. And, probably, love ...
To pinch my hand, or something, it's time to wake up ...
I believe in good to much, I am so charmingly blind
In your eyes I was frantically looking for traces of us,
Or maybe it was just a chill that has already passed? ..
The next summer will come, declaring its rights
When will all this be forgotten and decay to dust? ..
So many countries, kilometers, spaces ... Tired of counting
And not a single miserable corner where you could hug me ...
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11th May 2021 9:16pm
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Sometimes it definitely feels like that but I am glad you loved it! You are so sweet Lj. Big Hugs back! 💖 Thank you so much for the comment.
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11th May 2021 9:17pm
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11th May 2021 9:47pm
Thank you so much for the comment FeN. Even though it's sad I am happy you think it was epicly done. :) Bless and love back at ya. 💖
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11th May 2021 10:03pm
Yes, it is; I thought about using the bittersweet theme too. Thank you so much for the awesome compliment and sticking around watching the changes, that really does mean a lot to me. 💖
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11th May 2021 10:44pm
This entry jumps out at me
You write sadness with an eloquent empathy, I wish I could just clear a path for you and line it with Stargazer Lilies ...
Better days ahead Kristina
Solid ink
BIG LIKE
You write sadness with an eloquent empathy, I wish I could just clear a path for you and line it with Stargazer Lilies ...
Better days ahead Kristina
Solid ink
BIG LIKE
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11th May 2021 11:34pm
Thank you so much for the super sweet comment PS! I adore Stargazer Lilies and consider them one of the best smelling flowers ever so that sounds like a truly lovely path. I look forward to better days but a lot going on at the moment. Love the Big Like. 💖
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11th May 2021 11:35pm
Hey Francisco! Not pissed, just frustrated and sad but I have a lot going on at the moment. Thank you so much for the comment and continued encouragement! 💖
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12th May 2021 6:19am
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12th May 2021 1:27pm
Thank you so much for the comment. I am really happy you liked it. Love and light to you as well. :) 💖
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12th May 2021 2:17pm
The words and puzzle picture are perfect fits, just another example of your amazing talent. Hugs and peace, oral
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12th May 2021 2:28pm
Hey Oral. I am really happy you like the combination. Thank you so much for the wonderful compliment. Extra hugs! 💖
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12th May 2021 2:53pm
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12th May 2021 3:12pm
Ah yes, the pieces do not always fit; maybe even from the wrong puzzle but we try to make them fit anyway. I am glad you like the question and answer aspect. Have plenty of intense emotions to get bottled up in the writing. :) Oh boy! A shovel, I had not thought of that, that's why it's always good to get advice sometimes. Getting pretty dark there with the permanent solutions PQ. :p 🥓
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12th May 2021 11:58pm
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13th May 2021 12:40pm
Hey Remy! It definitely can be cathartic sometimes, just depends on the nature of the writing. Thank you so much for the comment. 💖
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13th May 2021 6:49pm
Very gripping ... poignant write ... "Between us - time and the abyss" ... great coupling with this ... "Charmingly blind" ... a combo that gave me pause ... made me smile ... knowingly ... "The next summer will come, declaring its rights" ... impactful line ... brought back a flood of summer memories ... all insisting on being remembered ... cherished ... savored ... the last line aches ... echoes before fading ... to the rest of the white space of the page ... wonderful write Kristina ...
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13th May 2021 7:40pm
Hey LDF! I am glad you found it gripping and poignant with some lines you liked. :) Summer will be here before we know it and although I used it as a positive, I am actually not looking forward to the heat and humidity. lol But we get to do all those wonderful summer activities right and hopefully less Covid concerns. Fully vaccinated now. yay! Oh we spend so much time in the white space don't we? Thank you so much for the comment and compliment! 💖
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4th Jul 2021 5:28pm
"In your eyes I was frantically looking for traces of us," it's those little instances when the weight of the universe seems to come crashing on the soul. Putting the pieces together is never easy, only feel the disappointment and having questions go unanswered for a long time.
Powerful write Kx.
Powerful write Kx.
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6th Jul 2021 4:27pm
Absolutely, perfectly said. That weight can suffocate and the separation tears at the soul trying to get back what was lost. Always trying to find the right pieces and put them back in the appropriate place. I am happy you found it to be a powerful write. Thanks again for all of your feedback Wally. 💖