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till i lose all form...and bake in your heat
feed me idle fodder
right from the palm of your hand
let me drink your mind’s mood
let my heat be regulated by your whims
so you may bathe in the affect of your cruelty
those lite caresses leading to no’s
again and again
so that i can drink you in
and plea to you with my eyes soaked in need
swim in your aloof aura
like stars around the dizzy
rake my presence like a zen garden
sweeping my desperation beneath rigid rocks
pruning me into your silent bonsai
and ensure i learn
the steadiness of suffering for you
right from the palm of your hand
let me drink your mind’s mood
let my heat be regulated by your whims
so you may bathe in the affect of your cruelty
those lite caresses leading to no’s
again and again
so that i can drink you in
and plea to you with my eyes soaked in need
swim in your aloof aura
like stars around the dizzy
rake my presence like a zen garden
sweeping my desperation beneath rigid rocks
pruning me into your silent bonsai
and ensure i learn
the steadiness of suffering for you
Published 14th Jan 2021
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14th Jan 2021 4:43pm
"pruning me into your silent bonsai"
... is a metaphorical stroke of genius, line...
Such a well penned submissive write...
I've read it three times... 💜
xoxo
B
... is a metaphorical stroke of genius, line...
Such a well penned submissive write...
I've read it three times... 💜
xoxo
B
14th Jan 2021 5:06pm
14th Jan 2021 4:53pm
i love this, it just flirts with, passes by the idea of actual love ... it's a grown man's boyish infatuation and emotional dependency packaged as kink and i really like it
14th Jan 2021 5:07pm
i might be able to stop writing now...you so have me pegged. thank you for the insightful read!
14th Jan 2021 5:18pm
14th Jan 2021 7:13pm
haha, i think you caught me in a freudian slipknot there! but i like how easily 'no' rolls off your tongue :)!
16th Jan 2021 2:14pm
Oh the sweetness of that torture leading to the edge over and over again. Intoxicated by the domination and surrendering everything, even your mood while you share in theirs. Pain and pleasure mixed overwhelming the senses. Being shaped by someone else's darkest desires and fantasies, allowing them full power and feeling truly alive. Raking the Zen garden makes me think of nails on the skin watering the bonsai with blood. Feeding the lust that comes from absolute power and control, and absolute surrender.
16th Jan 2021 4:05pm
wow...quite the insightful read...all true. it is exhilarating to know the ideas come through that crisply. thank you for that close read and sharing what hit you...i take great pains trying to convey those ideas.
16th Jan 2021 7:52pm
Got it loud and clear, really enjoyed this one a lot. You did a great job conveying those ideas; at least to me. You may find some of my BDSM writes interesting. This was the first I read from you, I have not had a lot of time to read but looking forward to more. Kx
