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俳句を諦めました(I gave up Haiku)
hinataboko
omoide ga otoroeru
hone kara ochiru
kotoba ga tarinai
oto matawa jikan
subete machigatte iru
kyūki nagare
yasai kari
shima-gurashi
日向ぼこ
思い出が衰える
骨から落ちる
言葉が足りない
音または時間
すべて間違っている
吸気流れ
野菜狩り
しまぐらし
in the sun
memories fade
fall from the bone
not enough words
sound or time
everything is wrong
inspiration
vegetable picking
shimagurashi
omoide ga otoroeru
hone kara ochiru
kotoba ga tarinai
oto matawa jikan
subete machigatte iru
kyūki nagare
yasai kari
shima-gurashi
日向ぼこ
思い出が衰える
骨から落ちる
言葉が足りない
音または時間
すべて間違っている
吸気流れ
野菜狩り
しまぐらし
in the sun
memories fade
fall from the bone
not enough words
sound or time
everything is wrong
inspiration
vegetable picking
shimagurashi
Published 21st Oct 2020
Author's Note
The last one is for 菜摘(Natsumi) who I have been sharing poetry with on Shimagurashi.
In the last poem, another translation for Natsumi is "vegetable picking" and "inspiration" more directly translated here is just "intake flow."
In the last poem, another translation for Natsumi is "vegetable picking" and "inspiration" more directly translated here is just "intake flow."
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21st Oct 2020 3:22pm
I absolutely LOVE the last one. It contains the essence of Zen. Also reminds me of one of my favortie Basho's:
Teeth sensitive to the sand
in salad greens—
I’m getting old.
Translated by Robert Hass
I feel there an element missing in translation. You know, it's like going to the movies and seeing the whole movie, but when you purchase the DVD there is this part missing that you only get to see in the movies. Like that.
Teeth sensitive to the sand
in salad greens—
I’m getting old.
Translated by Robert Hass
I feel there an element missing in translation. You know, it's like going to the movies and seeing the whole movie, but when you purchase the DVD there is this part missing that you only get to see in the movies. Like that.
7th Mar 2021 11:27pm
I love Basho's work!
I really like that one too. I also really like:
From time to time
The clouds give rest
To the moon beholders...
and:
Yes, spring has come
This morning a nameless hill
Is shrouded in mist.
I remember feeling really conflicted watching 'The Lord of the Rings" on dvd for the first time. It served to 噛み殺す(kamikorosu), to stifle a smile.
I really like that word because 'kami' can mean 'God' and 'korosu' means 'to kill.'
I really like that one too. I also really like:
From time to time
The clouds give rest
To the moon beholders...
and:
Yes, spring has come
This morning a nameless hill
Is shrouded in mist.
I remember feeling really conflicted watching 'The Lord of the Rings" on dvd for the first time. It served to 噛み殺す(kamikorosu), to stifle a smile.
I really like that word because 'kami' can mean 'God' and 'korosu' means 'to kill.'
11th Nov 2020 11:27pm
I can't describe or say exactly what i like about this haiku. It sparks so many images in my head and although they're very different and random, they fit so perfectly together.
