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tell me a lie
Love is the most expensive and sought-after feeling in this world.
We even pay for it with tears and grief.—Maria Bastida
tell me a lie
though the night with her was sultry
you did not commit adultery
—else, will i die…
tell me a lie
that you will not think of leaving
though my heart is bruised with grieving
—never good-bye!
tell me a lie
that the lies you wove this morning
breached your tongue without much warning
—can truth be wry?
tell me a lie
that your penitence is genuine
though my heart is far from sanguine
—pie in the sky?
tell me a lie
that your love will never falter
though you slay me at the altar
—there let me die!
© Copyright 2020 October 04
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
We even pay for it with tears and grief.—Maria Bastida
tell me a lie
though the night with her was sultry
you did not commit adultery
—else, will i die…
tell me a lie
that you will not think of leaving
though my heart is bruised with grieving
—never good-bye!
tell me a lie
that the lies you wove this morning
breached your tongue without much warning
—can truth be wry?
tell me a lie
that your penitence is genuine
though my heart is far from sanguine
—pie in the sky?
tell me a lie
that your love will never falter
though you slay me at the altar
—there let me die!
© Copyright 2020 October 04
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
Published 5th Oct 2020
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5th Oct 2020 7:42am
"—pie in the sky?" :D Hahahahaha! Nice!
"that your love will never falter
though you slay me at the altar" :D Very slick!
"that your love will never falter
though you slay me at the altar" :D Very slick!
Thank you, arortiz73, for picking up the tragic humour in the poem. Pie in the sky, indeed -- too much to hope for!
The reality of dying at the altar is true for those who enter into or continue in relationships with their eyes wide open to the ultimate self-sacrifice required of them -- often futile and therefore stupid.
Thanks for your feedback.
Sincerely
cab
The reality of dying at the altar is true for those who enter into or continue in relationships with their eyes wide open to the ultimate self-sacrifice required of them -- often futile and therefore stupid.
Thanks for your feedback.
Sincerely
cab
Anonymous
6th Oct 2020 1:54am
Wait, who's officiating this marriage? Quentin Tarantino? Geez, I hope you were being metaphorical or something with the slaying .....
9th Oct 2020 3:22pm
In this tragic-comedic poem, JB, the wedding is already over, if not the marriage. It reflects on sacrificial love, in which the victim of infidelity has no ambition to move on, despite the slaughter of her faithfulness.
Thanks for your observation, which, as always, exposes some critical detail of what a poem expresses.
Sincerely
csb
Thanks for your observation, which, as always, exposes some critical detail of what a poem expresses.
Sincerely
csb
9th Oct 2020 7:50am
Thank you, Heezy_Voice.
I appreciate your not only taking the time to read the poem, but to bless the page with a compliment.
Sincerely
cab
I appreciate your not only taking the time to read the poem, but to bless the page with a compliment.
Sincerely
cab
18th Oct 2020 5:35am
💎Very good!💎
You make impressive poetry. 👏😎
It came with visual art, great form and powerful feelings!
You make impressive poetry. 👏😎
It came with visual art, great form and powerful feelings!
Thank you, EW.
Your words carry particular import for me because I respect your opinion.
Your R/L inclusion is a wow beyond my expectations. I'm glad you like this piece; I hope that my efforts to improve will make me more worthy of such accolades.
Yours sincerely
cab
Your words carry particular import for me because I respect your opinion.
Your R/L inclusion is a wow beyond my expectations. I'm glad you like this piece; I hope that my efforts to improve will make me more worthy of such accolades.
Yours sincerely
cab
19th Oct 2020 6:05am
Thank you! I’m a fan of your philosophy in poetry! It’s very uplifting to read your work. 🌟
19th Oct 2020 7:41pm
