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lemon seeds in a straw
youth is a fly
crawling the table
to be shooshed
away from the
sugar bowl...
the years are
lemons in our
mouth
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Re. lemon seeds in a straw
12th Sep 2020 9:30am
Wow ... this is so deep ... fly ... sugar bowl ... lemons ... splendid blend of images ... great flow ... excellent line breaks ... one of your very best poems ...
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Re: Re. lemon seeds in a straw
12th Sep 2020 2:02pm
Re. lemon seeds in a straw
12th Sep 2020 10:23am
your title.... it's truly inspired. As is the rest of this burst of brilliance before me
oh, bk
Your mind is exquisite
I 💜 kittys
lol
xo
B
oh, bk
Your mind is exquisite
I 💜 kittys
lol
xo
B
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Re: Re. lemon seeds in a straw
12th Sep 2020 2:00pm
Re. lemon seeds in a straw
12th Sep 2020 11:33am
Dear BK,
Seeds in a straw. Always a complete gag when that unexpectedly happens. What’s so interesting to me is reading this I’m completely engaged in my favorite breakfast place literally shooing that damned fly that won’t go away and repeating to the waitress “no lemon” in my soda order! Because she’ll forget I’ll have to take the wedge off the glass and inevitably a seed will slip to the bottom and I’ll slurp it in my straw thus leaving the taste of lemons and life’s bitterness in my mouth- you genius poet!!
H🌷
Seeds in a straw. Always a complete gag when that unexpectedly happens. What’s so interesting to me is reading this I’m completely engaged in my favorite breakfast place literally shooing that damned fly that won’t go away and repeating to the waitress “no lemon” in my soda order! Because she’ll forget I’ll have to take the wedge off the glass and inevitably a seed will slip to the bottom and I’ll slurp it in my straw thus leaving the taste of lemons and life’s bitterness in my mouth- you genius poet!!
H🌷
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12th Sep 2020 2:00pm
Re. lemon seeds in a straw
12th Sep 2020 3:24pm
A most evocative piece, Kittybud...well considered and masterfully expressed it's true...those damned seeds are a pain-in-the-arse
But I hope your lemons are sweet.h4u... Ely
But I hope your lemons are sweet.h4u... Ely
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Re: Re. lemon seeds in a straw
12th Sep 2020 4:27pm
Re. lemon seeds in a straw
14th Sep 2020 00:10am
Re: Re. lemon seeds in a straw
14th Sep 2020 1:06am
No it doesn't does it. Heavy is the day.
Good to hear from you Harry. Hope all is good in your corner of the world.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
Good to hear from you Harry. Hope all is good in your corner of the world.
hugs,
buddhakitty.