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CIVILITUS PORTES LUNITAS
byDaKozak,TueJan24,2012at10:04am
LUNITUS PATRA CIVILITAS
okay, it doesn't 'mean'
any thing -
Luna! Lunas! Lunitas!
Lunar
fragments
of[a]mind[of]left'be'hind,behind
all thee Rights&promises of
[my]mat
erial use'full'ness having gone
sourrotten super-stinky wit all thee rest
of
[my] gaping
fault-----h'ow[ever], All Is Forgiven,
dearSir..uncOnditional Amnesty, a
full-pardon awaits thee-----absolution d'absolute
of the finest vintage
finest vin'yard thee bestlittle squirmy'fine
vine
bearing forth thee sweetest of forgotten'bidden
fruit[s] wit'which eye'eye hereby [in]toxify
My Legacy which none-will-preserve,
nor notice being gone/lost/over/
fini
finitas
finitatum[in-deepwit'in] finity [of]
senseless nonsense makebelieve
wordsounds
______dkzk24jan2012, \\\\\
LUNITUS PATRA CIVILITAS
okay, it doesn't 'mean'
any thing -
Luna! Lunas! Lunitas!
Lunar
fragments
of[a]mind[of]left'be'hind,behind
all thee Rights&promises of
[my]mat
erial use'full'ness having gone
sourrotten super-stinky wit all thee rest
of
[my] gaping
fault-----h'ow[ever], All Is Forgiven,
dearSir..uncOnditional Amnesty, a
full-pardon awaits thee-----absolution d'absolute
of the finest vintage
finest vin'yard thee bestlittle squirmy'fine
vine
bearing forth thee sweetest of forgotten'bidden
fruit[s] wit'which eye'eye hereby [in]toxify
My Legacy which none-will-preserve,
nor notice being gone/lost/over/
fini
finitas
finitatum[in-deepwit'in] finity [of]
senseless nonsense makebelieve
wordsounds
______dkzk24jan2012, \\\\\
Published 24th Jan 2012
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25th Jan 2012 3:02am
The wordsounds got me. Even though you warn at the outset about the meaning I still had to try & it took a few minutes to realize that you were doing the same thing in Latin as you do in English. So you're right it doesn't literally mean something specific but we still understand it. I'm thinking about all the parentheses, & how you take the words/ phrases and sort-of glue on a couple different readings for each one. That leaves the words looking kind of like that picture up there. I think these are probably the exact right steps for the "legacy" ... just keep putting it out there.
25th Jan 2012 2:15pm
knox me out the way yr able to read these things. unlike any 'feedback' i've ever gotten
a great gift [to me]
a great gift [to me]
