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Fairy tales
All the most beautiful fairy tales
You wrote them for me
You smelled like cut flowers
And made me feel like a child
Everything new and exciting
I just shudder
Whenever I feel you next to me
But without any shame
you knocked me down
And in four walls
locked me up
I'm still looking at that place
Where you stood in past
At least you used to regret it
Do you want to live without me now?
Should I have other dreams,
not ours
When you enter at night
Like everyone who sins
You smile at me like you did
Does your every look know,
Is it called happiness
I know all sorrows hurt
And all defeats
But this one isn't after you yet
More tears
When I remind myself
I can still feel you under my skin
You wrote them for me
You smelled like cut flowers
And made me feel like a child
Everything new and exciting
I just shudder
Whenever I feel you next to me
But without any shame
you knocked me down
And in four walls
locked me up
I'm still looking at that place
Where you stood in past
At least you used to regret it
Do you want to live without me now?
Should I have other dreams,
not ours
When you enter at night
Like everyone who sins
You smile at me like you did
Does your every look know,
Is it called happiness
I know all sorrows hurt
And all defeats
But this one isn't after you yet
More tears
When I remind myself
I can still feel you under my skin
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Re. Fairy tales
15th Jul 2020 9:56pm
Dear Kristina, I can feel the longing, pain, sadness, and perhaps confusion in this piece. Beautifully written and I like the fairy tale motif. This passage is touching and comforting,
"You smelled like cut flowers
And made me feel like a child"
"You smelled like cut flowers
And made me feel like a child"
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Re: Re. Fairy tales
15th Jul 2020 10:31pm
Thanks for the comment GW, as always I really appreciate the compliment and your feedback. I like that you said confusion as that is certainly very pertinent to the message. 💖
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16th Jul 2020 1:45am
I actually hesitated writing confusion, hence the "perhaps." I just felt confused for you😘
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Re. Fairy tales
15th Jul 2020 11:01pm
Dear K,
Every part of me wants to scream out “cut and run for the hills!” But love is an emotion that ensnares and hold firm.
This is an excellent metaphor usage. I wish I was this creative! Part of me also wants to scream “don’t forget about you!” It’s so much easier to say than do. May any pain you’re experiencing is of short duration. Great write. H🌷
Every part of me wants to scream out “cut and run for the hills!” But love is an emotion that ensnares and hold firm.
This is an excellent metaphor usage. I wish I was this creative! Part of me also wants to scream “don’t forget about you!” It’s so much easier to say than do. May any pain you’re experiencing is of short duration. Great write. H🌷
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15th Jul 2020 11:38pm
Thanks Honoria, you truly are a beautiful soul and I appreciate your concern and feedback more than you know. I am trying to not forget about me and I hope you will do the same. Because you really deserve the best. ❤
Re. Fairy tales
15th Jul 2020 11:30pm
Writing seems to be an outlet for figuring out life's puzzles. Sorry I missed your video of your audio but this was well done. 😊
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Re: Re. Fairy tales
15th Jul 2020 11:41pm
It certainly helps to organize one's thoughts. :) I will take that you miss it as a compliment. And who knows, in my infinite flakiness maybe I will post something audio again. lol ❤
Re: Re. Fairy tales
16th Jul 2020 00:00am
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If I did not keep you guessing then where is the fun in that? lol you won't find many good clues here I am afraid. And I did think your last comment on the audio one was pretty funny. :)
Re. Fairy tales
15th Jul 2020 11:46pm
Well done Kristina
This piece is elegant and beautifully devastating
Thank you for sharing
This piece is elegant and beautifully devastating
Thank you for sharing
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Re: Re. Fairy tales
16th Jul 2020 00:30am
Thanks Swagger, I really appreciate the feedback a lot and I am happy that you found it well done and elegant. ❤ And of course, devastating makes sense also.
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17th Jul 2020 9:05pm
Re. Fairy tales
18th Jul 2020 2:52am
Love this especially the last line... you know sometimes no matter how much you move on, no matter how many years pass by. It’s hard to remove some people from your heart and sole
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18th Jul 2020 8:36pm
Thanks buddydog, I am glad you liked it. ❤ That is very true, some people leave a lasting impression and sometimes scars on the heart and soul.
Re. Fairy tales
19th Jul 2020 9:59pm
Wow ... how gripping ... it shares such a vulnerability ... expresses what I have felt ... in some trace of a way ... still do ... bravo KX ...
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Re: Re. Fairy tales
19th Jul 2020 10:19pm
Thanks LDF, if I can get a wow from you I will take that as good thing. :) Thanks for commenting and your great feedback. I always love hearing your thoughts. :) 💖