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Unknown Truth
Alas the world stood before me
the shapeless shifting mass of humanity
I had thoughts the world did not exist
save only my perception of this
Laws of physics laws of government
edicts of nature theorems mathematics
Ordering constraint casting jokes on jokes
mental manifestation of the unsaid yoke
All things are of the same basis just again and again
for nothing is infinity beginning is end
So do you comprehend my soliloquy
can at last the world perceive of me
Of this shapeless shifting mass of this mentality
the shapeless shifting mass of humanity
I had thoughts the world did not exist
save only my perception of this
Laws of physics laws of government
edicts of nature theorems mathematics
Ordering constraint casting jokes on jokes
mental manifestation of the unsaid yoke
All things are of the same basis just again and again
for nothing is infinity beginning is end
So do you comprehend my soliloquy
can at last the world perceive of me
Of this shapeless shifting mass of this mentality
Published 3rd Jul 2020
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3rd Jul 2020 3:46pm
3rd Jul 2020 4:23pm
It exists - even if in an unknown -- if someone is there / here to read it, hear it, see it
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within the confines of NO linear time
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within the confines of NO linear time
3rd Jul 2020 8:09pm
Overall , laid down relatively well , my friend...
I see where the words lead to , and are coming from...
*This* needs some work...( too *many* jokes )
"Ordering constraint casting jokes on jokes
mental manifestation of the unsaid joke"
( my opinion , only , of course )
I see where the words lead to , and are coming from...
*This* needs some work...( too *many* jokes )
"Ordering constraint casting jokes on jokes
mental manifestation of the unsaid joke"
( my opinion , only , of course )
3rd Jul 2020 9:34pm
It's so funny to me that you say this because when i was writing it i was thinking oh man i just rhymed jokes with jokes and jokes but every time i tried to change it i couldn't find any other way to paint that same picture. I truly appreciate your honesty thank you
3rd Jul 2020 9:56pm
"Mental Manifestation Of The Unsaid Yoke"
https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/yoke
https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/yoke
3rd Jul 2020 10:07pm
3rd Jul 2020 10:13pm
You are more than welcome , my friend...
Seemed appropriate by quality of sound ,
rhyme scheme , and layers of meaning...
Seemed appropriate by quality of sound ,
rhyme scheme , and layers of meaning...
