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Flowers can wither or blossom
I listen to what I can and know what I have to do
I do understand it all but also I'm kind of grasping
I try to let myself live with a positive attitude
but I have to admit I'm afraid I do not feel that way at all
Flowers wilt, and I am feeling strange and out of place
And with a night in peace but then the morning in battle
I am being blown around by the wind and my petals have folded
inward, hiding as the walls of my world close in around me
I want to stand on the stage forever in my best dress
until in the morning I know how my voice falters again
So I wish you love and peace and I will always give my all
I want to live my life to the fullest and with passion
Flowers wither and I only live once, I want to blossom
I do understand it all but also I'm kind of grasping
I try to let myself live with a positive attitude
but I have to admit I'm afraid I do not feel that way at all
Flowers wilt, and I am feeling strange and out of place
And with a night in peace but then the morning in battle
I am being blown around by the wind and my petals have folded
inward, hiding as the walls of my world close in around me
I want to stand on the stage forever in my best dress
until in the morning I know how my voice falters again
So I wish you love and peace and I will always give my all
I want to live my life to the fullest and with passion
Flowers wither and I only live once, I want to blossom
Published 26th May 2020
| Edited 31st May 2020
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27th May 2020 1:14am
27th May 2020 10:36pm
27th May 2020 3:21am
Dear K,
I had a professor long ago who said, “life is not a dress rehearsal”. It didn’t sink in until I was graduated and much older and then it hit. You do want to bloom. You get one shot make it count.
“And with a night in peace but then the morning in battle” this is an intersting turn of phrase and one that makes me think you’ve reconciled to outcomes of that day only to start the fight anew.
Your insight is very perceptive. Your voice comes through very kindly, and that’s such a difficult achievement as inflection can’t be heard in writing. Lovely write. H🌷
I had a professor long ago who said, “life is not a dress rehearsal”. It didn’t sink in until I was graduated and much older and then it hit. You do want to bloom. You get one shot make it count.
“And with a night in peace but then the morning in battle” this is an intersting turn of phrase and one that makes me think you’ve reconciled to outcomes of that day only to start the fight anew.
Your insight is very perceptive. Your voice comes through very kindly, and that’s such a difficult achievement as inflection can’t be heard in writing. Lovely write. H🌷
27th May 2020 10:42pm
Thanks a lot Honoria, I really like your comment a lot and I appreciate it very much.
And this is a good interpretation. :)
“And with a night in peace but then the morning in battle” this is an intersting turn of phrase and one that makes me think you’ve reconciled to outcomes of that day only to start the fight anew.
And this is a good interpretation. :)
“And with a night in peace but then the morning in battle” this is an intersting turn of phrase and one that makes me think you’ve reconciled to outcomes of that day only to start the fight anew.
11th Jun 2020 00:08am
Yup - blossom and blooming is what it's all about!
i think i heard a near rhyme in the 1st 2 lines - nice!
i think i heard a near rhyme in the 1st 2 lines - nice!
11th Jun 2020 1:08am
11th Jun 2020 8:02am
For me,
i struggle to rhyme
it takes work and often a lot of time
You might practice using Rhyming sites online
such as Rhyme Zone
i use Word Hippo for many things other than Rhyming but there is that, as well.
https://www.wordhippo.com/
I do have a handful of rhyming spills in my Poetry page and each one took longer than my free verse
so don't get discouraged
just practice and if You want to PM with it before You post, that would be fine, too.
i struggle to rhyme
it takes work and often a lot of time
You might practice using Rhyming sites online
such as Rhyme Zone
i use Word Hippo for many things other than Rhyming but there is that, as well.
https://www.wordhippo.com/
I do have a handful of rhyming spills in my Poetry page and each one took longer than my free verse
so don't get discouraged
just practice and if You want to PM with it before You post, that would be fine, too.
11th Jun 2020 10:03pm
Thanks Tallen!, for the suggestions and the gracious offer. I may take you up on that at some point. :)
20th Feb 2021 3:36am
The early struggles as you unfold your petals, your stalk proves to be strong enough to resist the wind and elements (nay-sayers). Unsure if your spot is in the shadows or bathed in nurturing UV. Now only a few months later, your petals bask in the sunshine as your blossom attracts the gaze of admirers.
20th Feb 2021 2:41pm
That is really beautiful and poetic DaVinci... you need to make a poem out of that. ;) Lovely! Thank you so much for going back and pulling from the old vault to find this one. xo
28th Jan 2022 10:26pm
4th Feb 2022 1:01am
I do love giving chills, whether it is with a light touch on the skin or .... ;) I am so happy you found it beautiful and liked the message. ;) xo
19th Nov 2022 8:24pm
Another writer may have populated this piece with meaningless, flowery overkill and dead metaphors...you chose the higher road! Excellent.
20th Nov 2022 1:07am
All I definitely don't do meaningless. Or flowery overkill and dead metaphors. :) Always traveling the high roads even underground. I do love excellent. WOW! you are reminding me of some really old pieces. It's interesting that's for sure... Thank you! This is quite a quest through my older offerings. :)
