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A Daisy For You
Everyone else is happy
At least that's what I see
I'm left alone, I'm hiding
The redness in my eyes from crying
You look at me and feel pity
I'm dying inside just let me
It's this internal burning
That keeps me from a happy feeling
I am the lock with no key
Useful in theory but useless in reality
I'm discarded as I should be
What do I have to offer but in death A Fertilized Daisy
At least that's what I see
I'm left alone, I'm hiding
The redness in my eyes from crying
You look at me and feel pity
I'm dying inside just let me
It's this internal burning
That keeps me from a happy feeling
I am the lock with no key
Useful in theory but useless in reality
I'm discarded as I should be
What do I have to offer but in death A Fertilized Daisy
Published 21st Apr 2020
| Edited 12th Aug 2020
Author's Note
It's easy for the biggest smile to be misunderstood. A smile is a way to cope with the burning inside for many... like myself.
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22nd Apr 2020 00:07am
Yes expressions tell very little of what's going on with a person on the inside, hope things get better dude
Anonymous
23rd Apr 2020 7:38pm
Very exposed words
Enjoyed it
Enjoyed it
23rd Apr 2020 7:39pm
24th Apr 2020 4:51pm
Nicely composed yet the eyes can't hide what one feels deep within the subconsciousness of your mind and the deepness of your heart and soul even behind wearing a mask as a smile..respect brother
26th Apr 2020 3:44pm
I love the last stanza. It’s the metaphor of you being a useless lock to be discarded that gripped me. And then to think that in death, going back to the ground will leave a new opportunity for someone else to have the happiness that you weren’t able to find makes it seem almost worth it.
Thank you for your artistry.
Thank you for your artistry.
28th Apr 2020 5:02pm
29th Apr 2020 5:07pm
Despair and anguish.. but knowing that there is some good even in death!
Dark insightful reflection, as deep as it gets.
Dark insightful reflection, as deep as it gets.
12th Aug 2020 8:14pm
Firstly, I was a professional photographer for well over a decade who shot for major businesses and non-profits, even sports teams for the experience. This is a really good shot of the daisy backdropped with the cross. It's a very profound photo that says so much in so few words.
Secondly, the poem: is very reflective of the image; however, it would also work without it. It does make one wonder what we are able to offer in death except that which grows upon our own graves. The essence is very nicely conveyed.
Secondly, the poem: is very reflective of the image; however, it would also work without it. It does make one wonder what we are able to offer in death except that which grows upon our own graves. The essence is very nicely conveyed.
14th Aug 2020 4:48am
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4th Jun 2021 11:03am
this written from a veteran, acquires a whole new meaning.
I feel like crying..
very powerful ending, too
I feel like crying..
very powerful ending, too
4th Jun 2021 9:45pm
9th Jul 2021 9:47am
I am the lock with no key
Useful in theory but useless in reality
I'm discarded as I should be
What do I have to offer but in death A Fertilized Daisy
seeing now that ur an artist i can understand the torment.
Yes the word is TORMENTED. Epic write with an awesome pic.
14th Jul 2021 3:41am
