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A Winning Hand
You like to play games with my heart
And prefer to go in circles
To set limits for me, but only
Fools play by the rules
Yes, I pulled the handle
And sure I wanted to win
But you always change the game
Poker, you tell me it's cool
That there is no way to lose
You want me to put everything on the table
So I take a risk on loving you
But you do not play fair
And although I have a winning hand
Darling, congratulations
I fold, You win
And prefer to go in circles
To set limits for me, but only
Fools play by the rules
Yes, I pulled the handle
And sure I wanted to win
But you always change the game
Poker, you tell me it's cool
That there is no way to lose
You want me to put everything on the table
So I take a risk on loving you
But you do not play fair
And although I have a winning hand
Darling, congratulations
I fold, You win
Published 9th Apr 2020
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10th Apr 2020 3:41pm
i love the Casino metaphors throughout this Brevity spill
i wrote using Chess as my metaphor and while i play Texas Hold 'em from time to time it never occurred to me to use the game as a metaphor but You made it work. Well done.
i see nothing wrong with Your spill and so apologize if my feedback is weak
i wrote using Chess as my metaphor and while i play Texas Hold 'em from time to time it never occurred to me to use the game as a metaphor but You made it work. Well done.
i see nothing wrong with Your spill and so apologize if my feedback is weak
11th Apr 2020 7:07pm
Hey Tallen, thanks for stopping by; it's all good. I like chess, I will check yours out.
11th Apr 2020 7:12pm
Here's the link:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/331956-mates/
to my Chess metaphor (& real game)
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/331956-mates/
to my Chess metaphor (& real game)
20th Oct 2021 5:16pm
No one really wins when games are played to begin with. Beautiful writing.
20th Oct 2021 5:22pm
Thanks DS. You might have a point there... but aren't we always playing games for one reason or another. Perhaps we win some and we lose some or perhaps as you say we are only under the illusion that we can win. Maybe there are no winners.
