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Twilight
The remnants of yesterday’s fantasies we fell into begotten colors
Souls inflamed by the sparkling embers of breaths we exhaled
In the dawn of black and white we loved
unmercifully
Paralyzed sensations now obscured
in hues of fading gray
Souls inflamed by the sparkling embers of breaths we exhaled
In the dawn of black and white we loved
unmercifully
Paralyzed sensations now obscured
in hues of fading gray
Published 24th Mar 2020
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24th Mar 2020 1:47pm
Love everything about this ... first the structure ... the symmetry of it ... wonderful use of "s"s ... the flow is amazing ... the last line is simply perfect ...
8th Apr 2020 7:26pm
You have an excellent command of the English language I bet you are a voracious reader.
I say this because of the way your poems read.
There seems to be a great deal of planning and organization in how you put your words and phrases together.
Whereas some of us like to write on a whim with little editing if at all.
I wonder what type of genre of literature you are into.
I say this because of the way your poems read.
There seems to be a great deal of planning and organization in how you put your words and phrases together.
Whereas some of us like to write on a whim with little editing if at all.
I wonder what type of genre of literature you are into.
9th Apr 2020 2:50am
Thank you, and very expressive with the compliment, regarding your question, sir; I have a keen adoration for romance pieces, from such authors, Jane Austen, Margaret Mitchell, Jude Deveraux
