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For Us
I have an insatiable craving
a greedy intense thirst
a ravenous demand
For you
My electricity is aroused
unfueled fire inflamed
desired honey a river
You have a wanting addiction
a mouth watering compulsion
a voracious hunger
For me
Your passion is enlivened
ferocious ecstasy awakened
unwavering firmness alive
We have a breathless urgency
an exhilarating eagerness
a mind blowing acceleration
For us
Our gratification is blissful
climax harmonious
happiness heavenly
a greedy intense thirst
a ravenous demand
For you
My electricity is aroused
unfueled fire inflamed
desired honey a river
You have a wanting addiction
a mouth watering compulsion
a voracious hunger
For me
Your passion is enlivened
ferocious ecstasy awakened
unwavering firmness alive
We have a breathless urgency
an exhilarating eagerness
a mind blowing acceleration
For us
Our gratification is blissful
climax harmonious
happiness heavenly
Published 9th Jan 2012
| Edited 20th May 2012
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Anonymous
9th Jan 2012 8:43am
Oh yes Miss Rachel!
Now you're talking...You see that is just damn beautiful.
The imagery - Spectacular.
The build up - Mind blowing
The end - Harmonious.
In awe of the talented pen used to write this piece of art.
Al -x-
Now you're talking...You see that is just damn beautiful.
The imagery - Spectacular.
The build up - Mind blowing
The end - Harmonious.
In awe of the talented pen used to write this piece of art.
Al -x-
9th Jan 2012 8:49am
Anonymous
9th Jan 2012 8:48am
That is an amazing write Rachel :) That was beautifully done
9th Jan 2012 8:55am
9th Jan 2012 10:21am
"We have a breathless urgency
Our gratification is blissful"
two lines that are etched in my brain
Our gratification is blissful"
two lines that are etched in my brain
9th Jan 2012 12:17pm
9th Jan 2012 11:05am
9th Jan 2012 12:17pm
Only when I am writing am I able to tap into any of my emotions. Thanks so much for the compliment. :)
Anonymous
9th Jan 2012 3:06pm
whew - sometimes when you open up a poem - you are surprised of what you see - to call this tale electrifying would not do it justice - its more then that - more like a tidal wave of emotion thrown at you unexpectedly - a ravenous hunger pinning you down - where you can not escape - who would want to - a truly beautiful write - well done ! ^v^
9th Jan 2012 5:27pm
Thank you so much nightspirit! What a fantastic compliment. I am so glad that you enjoyed it. :)
9th Jan 2012 10:12pm
Erotica is my favorite.
I love the fact I could visualize without the vulgarity that comes with most erotica.
Great job.
I love the fact I could visualize without the vulgarity that comes with most erotica.
Great job.
9th Jan 2012 10:21pm
10th Jan 2012 5:57am
Each to be and individual then combined as one. It was wrote (I think with) as if at that given time nothing else exsisted but you and him. Great write
10th Jan 2012 6:38am
10th Jan 2012 1:22pm
10th Jan 2012 1:36pm
21st Jan 2012 11:30am
just a mere taste
of the lips on your face
can stimulate those below your waist
to feel me stroke at a steady pace
until you arrive at that special place
where you climax at every trace
of flesh as our frames race
to xxxstacy where only bliss is laced....;)
of the lips on your face
can stimulate those below your waist
to feel me stroke at a steady pace
until you arrive at that special place
where you climax at every trace
of flesh as our frames race
to xxxstacy where only bliss is laced....;)
22nd Jan 2012 4:47pm
22nd Jan 2012 11:43am
Nice piece of work, Rachel. I enjoyed its verve and the sheer enjoyment of being in love. Cheered my morning.
22nd Jan 2012 4:47pm
Anonymous
23rd Apr 2012 6:48am
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24th Apr 2012 3:09am
That is a huge compliment. Though not long lasting after I give you a list of names I think are much better.
Much appreciated the same though...I am so touched you feel that way about my work. :)
Much appreciated the same though...I am so touched you feel that way about my work. :)
Anonymous
27th Apr 2012 3:12am
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16th May 2012 6:49am
12th May 2012 12:31pm
12th May 2012 11:01pm
12th May 2012 12:40pm
and i wish i hadn't.. i loved the way you structured it and how all the words built on the feeling of the word before. intense, miss Rachel. bravo!
12th May 2012 11:03pm
15th May 2012 5:27am
I have no idea what you wrote, because you sound like a porn star, and that.. is... AWESOME!
Read the freaking phone book now!
Oh, right, the poem was pretty good.
HERE READ THIS SHAMPOO BOTTLE.
(I just missed the entire point of reviewing, didn't I... can you read my response out loud?)
:) Betty
Read the freaking phone book now!
Oh, right, the poem was pretty good.
HERE READ THIS SHAMPOO BOTTLE.
(I just missed the entire point of reviewing, didn't I... can you read my response out loud?)
:) Betty
15th May 2012 6:21am
Porn star? Goodness! I certainly didn't mean to.
It's a bit out of my comfort zone reading that.
Your response cracked me up though! Sure, I will read the shampoo bottle, lol.
Thanks for the feedback.
It's a bit out of my comfort zone reading that.
Your response cracked me up though! Sure, I will read the shampoo bottle, lol.
Thanks for the feedback.
15th May 2012 4:37pm
I wouldn't say porn star, but it definitely has a seductive quality.
Beautiful words and imagery. Has a great pace to it.
Well worded and well read, Rachel.
Beautiful words and imagery. Has a great pace to it.
Well worded and well read, Rachel.
15th May 2012 5:13pm
Thank you! Suductive is what I was going for. That makes me feel better. I am so glad you stopped by. :)
Anonymous
16th May 2012 5:24am
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16th May 2012 6:50am
24th Jul 2012 1:44am
I've read many of your pieces and this is the first I've hit your audio. I heard your 3 in the competition and your voice adds MUCH to each.
24th Jul 2012 6:14am
