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HAVE YOU FORGOTTEN ME?
HAVE YOU FORGOTTEN ME?
I expect something of great avail
to appear to me in my dull life.
News of hidden hope l always sought,
but it left my side and went afar.
That man who'll bring me what's waited for
will attain from me what l can give
when l can regain my normal state
from the tears l shed, a mark of cheer.
Where are you my harbinger from here?
I have been distressed by my long wait.
I entreat the softness of your heart
to consider me ere it's too late.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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I expect something of great avail
to appear to me in my dull life.
News of hidden hope l always sought,
but it left my side and went afar.
That man who'll bring me what's waited for
will attain from me what l can give
when l can regain my normal state
from the tears l shed, a mark of cheer.
Where are you my harbinger from here?
I have been distressed by my long wait.
I entreat the softness of your heart
to consider me ere it's too late.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
____________________________________
Published 3rd Feb 2020
| Edited 4th Feb 2020
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3rd Feb 2020 4:35pm
This seems like an earnest plea in prayer, JZ. I enjoyed reading it very much.
3rd Feb 2020 4:48pm
Dear Ahavati,
I am very glad that you have enjoyed it very much. I really appreciate your opinion very much.
I am very glad that you have enjoyed it very much. I really appreciate your opinion very much.
3rd Feb 2020 6:17pm
The implication of this line:
"News of hidden hope l always sought",
is that you've never been able to obtain the object of your desire. Given this, this line:
but it left my side and went afar
is problematic. Leaving aside the question of whether hope has mobility, how could what you never had leave you?
So it seems to me that you have once again been true to form and failed to convey what you thought you were saying.
"News of hidden hope l always sought",
is that you've never been able to obtain the object of your desire. Given this, this line:
but it left my side and went afar
is problematic. Leaving aside the question of whether hope has mobility, how could what you never had leave you?
So it seems to me that you have once again been true to form and failed to convey what you thought you were saying.
4th Feb 2020 7:57am
We all feel lost sometimes. We all struggle to find hope. We try to act like everything is ok but the truth is we need help. We are completely falling apart. Well said. I felt every word.
4th Feb 2020 9:57am
Dear CP,
Thank you very much for your very kind comment. I really appreciate it.
Thank you very much for your very kind comment. I really appreciate it.
