How soon until we meet

a lovely flow and a booming organ - yay!

I absolutely love how you have incorporated major religions in this.  There are many paths home and you've illustrated that perfectly in this plea.  I additionally have noted how you've begun capitalizing only the sentences in your verse, and it makes it so much easier to read, particularly aloud.  

Watch your extraneous words; ask yourself if you need each and everyone you use; or, can it be cut without losing the meaning of the line or verse.  I also want to work with you on punctuation to emphasis and/or highlight how the reader experiences your poetry.  Punctuation is the prose of poetry in that it guides the reader.  

I will be starting a workshop here very soon:  

https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/workshop/read/11232/15/#465612

Also, you don't need 'me' in that final line, as RSVP implies that already.  Plus, it also maintains the rhyme without the extra word.  

Well done, Slip. Your improvement is remarkable!

I have take a leaf and noted your recommendations  IN the draft page when spelling errors (occour)  I put the word in brackets and continue with the flow and composition without stopping to google the word. I then returned and corrected all the bracketed words and subsequently remove the brackets. Quite hard--- learning "grammar" at the age of 78!~?

I call FOUL on that! If you can learn poetry you can learn ANYTHING to do with writing!