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Whispered thoughts
I've been alone in thought and life
In troubles bound by family strife
I've been undone by hearts of ice
In darkness bled with unheard cries
I've lived my life and tried to care
For those who've felt thier own despair
I've learned that I can't help to bare
The hurts that hide in their nightmares
I've lost myself and lost my hope
I've used a hundred ways to cope
I've lost my dreams now dream of ropes
In dreams I hang my heart and float
To pull the trigger would be bliss
No wound too deep for heavens kiss
To end the heart that beats in fits
No harm is done, no hurting missed
In troubles bound by family strife
I've been undone by hearts of ice
In darkness bled with unheard cries
I've lived my life and tried to care
For those who've felt thier own despair
I've learned that I can't help to bare
The hurts that hide in their nightmares
I've lost myself and lost my hope
I've used a hundred ways to cope
I've lost my dreams now dream of ropes
In dreams I hang my heart and float
To pull the trigger would be bliss
No wound too deep for heavens kiss
To end the heart that beats in fits
No harm is done, no hurting missed
Published 23rd Jan 2020
Author's Note
Whispers scream between my ears...
Some days are darker than others, some moments more painful. Today I felt great, then I felt manic, then I felt angry, then I felt hollow... and that's when I heard them. I know they lie, but it sounds so convincing. So I write.
Some days are darker than others, some moments more painful. Today I felt great, then I felt manic, then I felt angry, then I felt hollow... and that's when I heard them. I know they lie, but it sounds so convincing. So I write.
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23rd Jan 2020 5:27am
Very good defense move. Impale those demons on your pen!
And come back to tell us more healing tales of survival.
I believe you are actively taking charge of a very back and forth healing struggle.
🌹👏
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And come back to tell us more healing tales of survival.
I believe you are actively taking charge of a very back and forth healing struggle.
🌹👏
🦋
23rd Jan 2020 5:43am
Yes, exactly. This one just flew out of me in a fit of emotion, then I felt relief... thank you for your encouragement. I dont always have a gloomy out look of things, but my poetry usually makes it look that way. I write all the time, but mostly in journal form. It has always been cathartic to me. But when I'm in a bad place it seems to come out more poetic.
23rd Jan 2020 5:47am
Dear V,
I think you’ve written and set this up very well. I love the title and while the piece goes on to discuss a very serious subject you’ve lightened it by the rhyming aspect.
It’s a terribly rough place to be in emotionally when ending it all seems the most positive way out and yet, hope and a new day brings different options if we allow them and that’s what I like about your poem. You wrote it all out opting for a different outcome from what all the internal/external noise was saying. Well done! H🌷
I think you’ve written and set this up very well. I love the title and while the piece goes on to discuss a very serious subject you’ve lightened it by the rhyming aspect.
It’s a terribly rough place to be in emotionally when ending it all seems the most positive way out and yet, hope and a new day brings different options if we allow them and that’s what I like about your poem. You wrote it all out opting for a different outcome from what all the internal/external noise was saying. Well done! H🌷
24th Jan 2020 3:50am
Thank you for your kind words Honoria! It's hard sometimes to believe that a new day can bring new hope, but somewhere in me I know it's TRUE.
23rd Jan 2020 9:35am
i rarely have been able to spill when i hear the hallucinations
and admire those who, like You, can and do.
Way to purge and get out the emotions to ink
and admire those who, like You, can and do.
Way to purge and get out the emotions to ink
Thank you Tallen. I love to read your poems and writings. You seem like a very genuine and open person. Earth_empath fits so well when I read your stuff. You come across as both intense and soft hearted, like an infp.
23rd Jan 2020 9:01pm
Really touching and relatable. It is often those of us who suffer that care about the suffering of others. We empathize with that which we understand. I tend to eschew the end of line rhyme scheme, but you did a pretty organic job of it. Thank you for sharing with us Vickie. 💖💖
24th Jan 2020 3:36am
Thank you Daniel. You are right about empathizing
with others who suffer. Unfortunately I also practice the cliche saying of "hurt people hurt people."..... And I have a tendency to rhyme or sound sing song in my everyday life, and it comes through in my writing. I think it's just how my mind works.
with others who suffer. Unfortunately I also practice the cliche saying of "hurt people hurt people."..... And I have a tendency to rhyme or sound sing song in my everyday life, and it comes through in my writing. I think it's just how my mind works.
