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hushed nothings
Silence is loud
A deafening roar
To ears waiting for song
And a heart aching to be loved
Silence is loud
But please, my dear, don't turn away
Mistaking my silence for a stoic farce
When my hands are longing to hold you
A deafening roar
To ears waiting for song
And a heart aching to be loved
Silence is loud
But please, my dear, don't turn away
Mistaking my silence for a stoic farce
When my hands are longing to hold you
Published 14th Jan 2020
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Anonymous
14th Jan 2020 6:34am
Nice job, for such a young and beautiful lady.
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14th Jan 2020 6:46am
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14th Jan 2020 3:25pm
Silence is loud
But please, my dear, don't turn away
Mistaking my silence for a stoic farce
When my hands are longing to hold you
This creates some powerful imagery; and I think it resonates because it’s a thing we often do - mistaking our loved ones’ intentions or trying to guess at what their silence means. Beautifully done 💖
But please, my dear, don't turn away
Mistaking my silence for a stoic farce
When my hands are longing to hold you
This creates some powerful imagery; and I think it resonates because it’s a thing we often do - mistaking our loved ones’ intentions or trying to guess at what their silence means. Beautifully done 💖
15th Jan 2020 9:12pm
Love what Luna had to say. I would say, expand on this with some scene description between the two of you. The body language, haptics, mileu, make the scene come to life for the reader, like we are right there beside you. The brevity of the write has it's own charm though and it's good work.
