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Time after time
Time after time
Life got us together
To travel, explore and live more
Only for me to love her more
While she is making her own new world
With new people & new stories
And making me the invisible one
She looked for someone
To walk together with
Make life with, share love and sorrow with,
But never found one that
Connects with her heart and wandering soul
Time after time
I tell her that we are two lost souls
Swimming in a fish bowl
Connected with heart, mind and soul,
But she is still busy making new stories,
traveling new places,
And connecting with new people
Time after time
Life got us together
Only to connect us strong
And tear us apart
But the connect I felt with her
Is timeless, priceless and infinite
Because we go the same coffee shop, to drink the same coffee,
While we both are fucked up from each other.
Time after time
Only if she looked around
Towards men in her life
And see through me
She will realise that her man
Is right here, next to her,
In me. Because I love her heaps
From the moon and back
Life got us together
To travel, explore and live more
Only for me to love her more
While she is making her own new world
With new people & new stories
And making me the invisible one
She looked for someone
To walk together with
Make life with, share love and sorrow with,
But never found one that
Connects with her heart and wandering soul
Time after time
I tell her that we are two lost souls
Swimming in a fish bowl
Connected with heart, mind and soul,
But she is still busy making new stories,
traveling new places,
And connecting with new people
Time after time
Life got us together
Only to connect us strong
And tear us apart
But the connect I felt with her
Is timeless, priceless and infinite
Because we go the same coffee shop, to drink the same coffee,
While we both are fucked up from each other.
Time after time
Only if she looked around
Towards men in her life
And see through me
She will realise that her man
Is right here, next to her,
In me. Because I love her heaps
From the moon and back
Published 12th Jan 2020
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13th Jan 2020 2:11am
Hey Kanishka,
Your poem was extremely heartfelt, and touching... Perhaps one day you two will settle down together. I understand your struggle, as you probably don't want to hold her back if travelling is what she wants to do. Beautiful story, though. I think you did a really good job with this one.
I also enjoyed the Pink Floyd reference...
"I tell her that we are two lost souls
Swimming in a fish bowl
Connected with heart, mind and soul"
Pink Floyd is definitely one of my favorite bands... Some of the existentialism in my poetry is definitely due to me listening to them. You may see that if you read the right poems...
And the repetitive lull of the 'time after time' verses was very soothing... I think the whole thing flowed well. This part made me think of Cindy Lauper, heh.
By chance, are you kind of a music nut?
I think some of your musical influences are wearing off on you? 😁
Lastly, I just wanted to welcome you to DU. This place has been very good to me... The community is kind, gentle, helpful, and inspiring. I hope you are happy here, and I look forward to seeing what future writings you may publish here! I think you're a very good writer 😊
Best wishes,
-NewB
Your poem was extremely heartfelt, and touching... Perhaps one day you two will settle down together. I understand your struggle, as you probably don't want to hold her back if travelling is what she wants to do. Beautiful story, though. I think you did a really good job with this one.
I also enjoyed the Pink Floyd reference...
"I tell her that we are two lost souls
Swimming in a fish bowl
Connected with heart, mind and soul"
Pink Floyd is definitely one of my favorite bands... Some of the existentialism in my poetry is definitely due to me listening to them. You may see that if you read the right poems...
And the repetitive lull of the 'time after time' verses was very soothing... I think the whole thing flowed well. This part made me think of Cindy Lauper, heh.
By chance, are you kind of a music nut?
I think some of your musical influences are wearing off on you? 😁
Lastly, I just wanted to welcome you to DU. This place has been very good to me... The community is kind, gentle, helpful, and inspiring. I hope you are happy here, and I look forward to seeing what future writings you may publish here! I think you're a very good writer 😊
Best wishes,
-NewB
15th Jan 2020 8:26am
Thanks NewB.
Music has always been a great influence on how we think and write and create moments. The same gets visible in my work as well :)
and thanks for the warm welcome. I am already loving this community.
Cheers! KP
Music has always been a great influence on how we think and write and create moments. The same gets visible in my work as well :)
and thanks for the warm welcome. I am already loving this community.
Cheers! KP
13th Jan 2020 6:37am
Your poem is excellence. I love it. Keep up to your great work. :) pleez do comment/ review/ write your thoughts on my website & poems 2 thank you :)
15th Jan 2020 8:24am
Hey Sarah! Thanks so much for going through my words and appreciating it. Will definitly go through yours as well and let you know. Cheers!
