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Who am I
Who am I
Who are you
Look at the sky
Why is it blue
Living life
Ups and downs
Going day by day
and hoping to be found
The rain will fall
The sun will shine
Darkness will reign
Wanting life to be fine
Waking up
Walking around
Day will falter
But yet your mind will be wound
Do you remember
When as a kid
Life would go on
And you wouldn't think of what you did
Time will change
Heartache will come
But life will be there
When it is done
From one look
The road looks far
Driving miles not knowing
Where you are
Who am I
Who are you
Look at the sky
Why is it blue
Living life
Ups and downs
Going day by day
And hoping to be found
Looking for love
Traveling wide
Thinking about
How much is the ride
You start to wonder if
If I can
Love myself
And become a better man
Big regrets
Unfulfilled dreams
Unachievable goals
As the door isn't open as long as it seems
Beginnings end
Where do we begin
Trying to find hope
By looking within
The water will rise
Rockstars fame
Colors change
But the stars they stay the same
A time of peace
A time of nought
A moment of still
And the end of all thoughts
The light will shine
But maybe not
Death probably isn't
What you sought
Who am I
Who are you
Look at the sky
Why is it blue
Living life
Ups and downs
Going day by day
And hoping to be found
Who are you
Look at the sky
Why is it blue
Living life
Ups and downs
Going day by day
and hoping to be found
The rain will fall
The sun will shine
Darkness will reign
Wanting life to be fine
Waking up
Walking around
Day will falter
But yet your mind will be wound
Do you remember
When as a kid
Life would go on
And you wouldn't think of what you did
Time will change
Heartache will come
But life will be there
When it is done
From one look
The road looks far
Driving miles not knowing
Where you are
Who am I
Who are you
Look at the sky
Why is it blue
Living life
Ups and downs
Going day by day
And hoping to be found
Looking for love
Traveling wide
Thinking about
How much is the ride
You start to wonder if
If I can
Love myself
And become a better man
Big regrets
Unfulfilled dreams
Unachievable goals
As the door isn't open as long as it seems
Beginnings end
Where do we begin
Trying to find hope
By looking within
The water will rise
Rockstars fame
Colors change
But the stars they stay the same
A time of peace
A time of nought
A moment of still
And the end of all thoughts
The light will shine
But maybe not
Death probably isn't
What you sought
Who am I
Who are you
Look at the sky
Why is it blue
Living life
Ups and downs
Going day by day
And hoping to be found
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Re. Who am I
7th Jan 2020 9:00am
This is really great writing, cosiest... Very introspective and directly from the heart! Truly enjoyed this :)
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8th Jan 2020 1:38am
Echo NewBeginnings
stay straight all things are possible if you really want them as it will not happen overnight you have a great gift in words
nicely done
stay straight all things are possible if you really want them as it will not happen overnight you have a great gift in words
nicely done
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8th Jan 2020 1:39am
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Re. Who am I
14th Jan 2020 7:25am
A good poem, very well wrote....word choice and you cleverly used them...good flow of lines.. :)
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14th Jan 2020 2:11pm
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14th Jan 2020 2:14pm
Wow ... this one grips me ... great flow and cadence ... relentless questioning ... bravo ...
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14th Jan 2020 2:18pm
Re. Who am I
16th Jan 2020 9:40am
Hi, good message and deep. Makes you think how time flies trying to reach your dream in time. keep writing!
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16th Jan 2020 9:41am
Who am I
6th Feb 2020 00:37am
Hi, Jordan
I'm getting to see your mind from the other side at last!. And what a treatise! Your introspective writing gives me the fluency of a song, rather than spoken prosody.
The two recurrences of the opening two stanzas are a kind of sobering pendulum that seems to pull you (the persona) back into consciousness of being lost and seeking rescue.
Generally, although the words provoke some depth of thought, the -- I want to say -- lyrics are simple and unpretentious and not overly metaphorical.
Congratulations!
cab
I'm getting to see your mind from the other side at last!. And what a treatise! Your introspective writing gives me the fluency of a song, rather than spoken prosody.
The two recurrences of the opening two stanzas are a kind of sobering pendulum that seems to pull you (the persona) back into consciousness of being lost and seeking rescue.
Generally, although the words provoke some depth of thought, the -- I want to say -- lyrics are simple and unpretentious and not overly metaphorical.
Congratulations!
cab
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Re: Who am I
6th Feb 2020 00:41am
The truth is I don't force rhymes. Its how I like to write. It sounds better to me. Most of my words are emotion.
Re: Who am I
6th Feb 2020 1:20am
You have a great handle on what expresses you best: keep it going that way, Jordan.
Sincrerly
cab
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Re. Who am I
19th Feb 2020 3:59am
I enjoyed this; the short lines keep it moving at a nice pace. Especially like the repeated refrains. Nicely done!
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19th Feb 2020 3:59am