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The House On The Hill
The old house stands at the top of a hill
Alone and abandoned
Surrounded by grass and earth
Weeds sprout across an uneven path
The faded curtains and peeling paint hint of secrets
An unproven rumour from the past
Silent weeping
The house has remained empty for years
People don’t want to come here
Apart from drunken kids for weekend dares
Or the morbid drawn to tragedy
Alone and abandoned
Surrounded by grass and earth
Weeds sprout across an uneven path
The faded curtains and peeling paint hint of secrets
An unproven rumour from the past
Silent weeping
The house has remained empty for years
People don’t want to come here
Apart from drunken kids for weekend dares
Or the morbid drawn to tragedy
Published 23rd Dec 2019
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23rd Dec 2019 8:21pm
Oh ugh! This is such a testament to foreclosure or abandonments so prevalent in the housing market. The imagery is engaging and that ending fantastic. I can't suggest anything to change on this one, Lozzamus. Well done.
23rd Dec 2019 10:17pm
Anonymous
23rd Dec 2019 11:43pm
Conjures up associations with many a movie about a haunted house!
Since the first line echoes the title, you could probably condense it from
"The House On The Hill
The old house stands at the top of a hill
Alone and abandoned
Surrounded by grass and earth"
to
"The House On The Hill
Stands alone and abandoned
Surrounded by grass and earth"
Since the first line echoes the title, you could probably condense it from
"The House On The Hill
The old house stands at the top of a hill
Alone and abandoned
Surrounded by grass and earth"
to
"The House On The Hill
Stands alone and abandoned
Surrounded by grass and earth"
24th Dec 2019 00:19am
24th Dec 2019 1:20am
I think we have all known a place like this at sometime or another in our lives.
Well done Lozzamus.
regards,
buddhakitty.
Well done Lozzamus.
regards,
buddhakitty.
24th Dec 2019 8:52pm
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24th Dec 2019 11:56pm
14th Jan 2020 12:10pm
I already guessed that this was written late at night Lozzamus. It is a late at night poem. I've done this myself and even written a poem about writing poems (and things) late at night.
The atmosphere is all there with this as well done.
Kind regards, Alan
The atmosphere is all there with this as well done.
Kind regards, Alan
14th Jan 2020 9:29pm
