The Winter Poem

Brrrr. I felt the cold on this one, Lozzamus.

I typically don't like end stops in succession like this; however, this adds a bitter stop to each line, thus accentuating the finality of a cold winter.  The only honest critique I have would be to remove the first 'and' from the last line.

Raw, deep, and icy cold.

I would also comma after deep - just to emphasize the depth of the cold with a brief pause.

Well done.

Thanks very much, Ahavati. I feel cold just reading it.

Very nice, Lozzamus. Brought a chill to me 😁

Thanks very much, NewBegnnings. Winter is on the way.

Well done Lozzamus.


regards,
buddhakitty.

Many thanks, buddhakitty.

That first line is oh so true up here in America a few hours south of Canada.  

"Deceptive sunlight."

I like this line because it is especially applicable after snow falls and reflects sunlight. I require sunglasses while driving in such and it is like a full onslaught from every direction.

So true, JohnnyBlaze. Thanks for commenting.

Uhggggg the Winter months give me so many mixed emotions, depression more than joy.
But Good bourbon seems too be a good friend of mine while I’m stuck in a cold black and white movie for months on end haha.
Nice writing.

Thanks, jigg82.  I find winter quite hard to handle.

Nice short piece Lozzamus. But telling us what we already know. I would have liked to have seen metaphors used generously throughout.

Winter, the longest season of all,
Like a yawning cloud, slowly passing.
Deceptive sunlight
Playing tricks on the earth.
A hint of frost
Like a dusting of icing...
Snow may fall, sooner or later       etc.

Kind regards, Alan