pornography

"I will hide my face,
under the fluorescent light,
of stardom"

where all monsters wear masks
and my nakedness,
is little more than pornography

...kept away in the dark box of soul
luminous to nevermore dim old
hidden light burning bold

love
J

thank you dearest Jeff for such a very thoughtful comment you see so much and understand more with that genius of yours...


love Brenda 🌹

Yes a red light district photo matches this piece. But it makes us wonder

thank you dearest Me what does it make you wonder?

love Brenda ❤

perhaps it is distracting I'm going to take it off it doesn't really fit what I'm saying smiles ❤

We have visited Europe and we have spoken to a multitude of women. Mostly about bs but a great many about upbringing and career choices. We met a lot of ladies that were abused and traumatize and this is how they ended up in the profession. But we also met women that quit legitimate jobs, that paid good money, to work in this profession. We kinda think that the American concept of things makes it dark and undesirable  

you're right I think dearest Me we make women ashamed here is the USA...reading your reply further next to reading my poem again I could see how you were reading this...  
 
thank you for sharing your thoughts my friend ❤

confession of shadows of the night its the oldest profession in the world but in some countries like germany its legal treated as a job even with health benfits as it is not look down upon like here in the states....nicely composed

thank you dearest Stoney for the love and understanding of this write...

love Brenda 💕

THNK YOU FOR SHARING YOUR THOUGHTS...RESPECT

Brenda, I really enjoyed reading this confessional style poetry.  The patriarchy has a long history of telling women what they can and cannot do with their bodies.  Shame has been their weapon and fear ( in regards to strength and abuse ) their ammunition.  Of course I am not referring to all men; some stand beside our rights.

But this did make me think, and I appreciate that in poetry.  

I want to honor your request for critique by suggesting the following revisions to improve the quality of flow when reading. The excess commas added a disjointed nature to it when read aloud.  And there were a few end stops that interrupted a sentence.  As you know, I am a HUGE em dash whore. :D  

Anyway, keep or toss; your poem—your right! Much enjoyed regardless.

I'm lethargic in your glare—
turn away so I can again
glow brightly
in the blaring heat
of your contempt

I retreat [into] darkness,
where your red shouts at me—
 less
and my dark is enough
to drown-out anyone
lingering too long—
staring at the freak

I'm not your exhibit—
one-man showing nothing
but what it takes to hate me

I will hide my face
under the fluorescent light
of stardom—

where all monsters wear masks
and my nakedness
is little more than pornography

thank you beautiful Vati for your very thoughtful critique I struggled so hard with this poem and those damn commas... there should have been no full stops however grammarly may have thrown them in there lol...I deeply appreciate you and your poetry eyes...this poem for me operates on two levels one of flesh and the other of the soul being that the nakedness of our spirit exposes us so much more...I really tried with this one I doubt I will be employing commas again they are not my friend lol...

love Brenda ❤🌹❤🌹

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This is a high quality poem and the critique taken into consideretion polishes it to a glorious shine. Well done, Brenda.

thank you graciously dearest Johnny I'm so relieved beautiful Vati took this on in critique because I knew it needed help...I deeply appreciate the love on this write...

love Brenda ❤

Dear Crimsin, I enjoyed the piece and admire your ability to express.
I could be mistaken, but if pornography and prostitution were legal (but regulated to a degree) far fewer women would be exploited.  I know this to be the case in S.E. Asia and The Netherlands. I'd be eager to hear your thoughts!

hello, dearest poet thank you for sharing your thoughts on this I actually wrote a poem about my thoughts on this subject... I hope this helps...

https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/320902-whores-glory/

love Brenda ❤

Whoa... was hoping for a ‘bone raising’ lol but damn
didn’t expect to get B****h slapped with such power! lol... excellent spill lady 😊

aw sorry Poe yeah this one went kind of deep for me... I'm happy you felt it's power...

love Brenda 💕

thank you graciously dearest Daddy I'm happy you felt this one...

love Brenda ❤

There are two ways of looking at this discourse on the subject
This may read as being about addiction to porn
Then again it may be a commentary on the sexism as it exists in pornography and its objectification of women
It also raises the overall issue of human rights that are lacking when it comes to protecting those in this sex industry