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Her Alluring Eyes (Reprise)
In her alluring eyes I find my secret paradise,
Like a portal that us mortals wish to go through,
Where I reside in an eternal ecstasy, reprise,
In her heavenly embrace I completely subdue.
Like a portal that us mortals wish to go through,
I pursue the secrets to make her fire go higher,
In her heavenly embrace I completely subdue,
Into a world and realm of dreams and desire.
I pursue the secrets to make her fire go higher,
Immersed with a thirst that can’t be assuaged,
Into a world and realm of dreams and desire,
Where my dire passion can never be caged.
Immersed with a thirst that can’t be assuaged,
It lingers as the flames spread and take flight,
Where my dire passion can never be caged,
To a place full of grace and endless delight.
It lingers as the flames spread and take flight,
Where I reside in an eternal ecstasy, reprise,
To a place full of grace and endless delight,
In her alluring eyes I find my secret paradise.
Like a portal that us mortals wish to go through,
Where I reside in an eternal ecstasy, reprise,
In her heavenly embrace I completely subdue.
Like a portal that us mortals wish to go through,
I pursue the secrets to make her fire go higher,
In her heavenly embrace I completely subdue,
Into a world and realm of dreams and desire.
I pursue the secrets to make her fire go higher,
Immersed with a thirst that can’t be assuaged,
Into a world and realm of dreams and desire,
Where my dire passion can never be caged.
Immersed with a thirst that can’t be assuaged,
It lingers as the flames spread and take flight,
Where my dire passion can never be caged,
To a place full of grace and endless delight.
It lingers as the flames spread and take flight,
Where I reside in an eternal ecstasy, reprise,
To a place full of grace and endless delight,
In her alluring eyes I find my secret paradise.
Published 24th Nov 2019
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24th Nov 2019 8:07am
Rhyming summary:
Starts with a look into her eyes,
gravitates to between her thighs.
Favourite line:
I pursue the secrets to make her fire go higher
Starts with a look into her eyes,
gravitates to between her thighs.
Favourite line:
I pursue the secrets to make her fire go higher
25th Nov 2019 10:33pm
The first becomes the last, like a sandwich.
We all seek that fire and flame.
We all seek that fire and flame.
24th Nov 2019 2:41pm
Well done, Wally! I thought this was a Pantoum at first, but I see only the second line is being repeated vs the second and fourth. It's a very tight rhyme scheme and solid form, Wally. Well done.
25th Nov 2019 10:34pm
Thank you Ahavati,
I wasn't sure if I was all clear on the pantoum rules but I will be trying different styles (this being one) in the next couple of weeks.
I wasn't sure if I was all clear on the pantoum rules but I will be trying different styles (this being one) in the next couple of weeks.
Anonymous
24th Nov 2019 10:42pm
Very disciplined! Form is my kryptonite, so you have my utmost respect.
"Into a world and realm of dreams and desire."
My only suggestion would be to trim out the extra "and" like so:
"Into a worldly realm of dreams and desire."
"Into a world and realm of dreams and desire."
My only suggestion would be to trim out the extra "and" like so:
"Into a worldly realm of dreams and desire."
Thank you sir, I'll definately give it a try.
Yes, form tends to keep me in check and it's a struggle, which is why sometimes I write with a 16 syllable count lines.
Yes, form tends to keep me in check and it's a struggle, which is why sometimes I write with a 16 syllable count lines.
