DU, Thank You

Hey EW.......that’s what we’re all here for....to share tears.....vents.....smiles and stand beside each other in strength.......I personally admire you for the strength you show thru each and every ink you post......cause everyone of them shows how to be strong and face reality of life......you’re an amazing role model for us who have suffered the same fate......purple luv & hugs xo :)

Aww! Thank you.❤️

I always smile when you post, always for a new reason. You are a delightful poetess to know.

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I sometimes think of DUP like a beach where you can in a figurative way be naked, let it all out and be recharged, amidst others who also enjoy being there.

I like that analogy!

DU is a very special place indeed.  Gratitude toward those who inspire you is so important.  Looking at the light in everything builds positive character.   This was very sweet of you to share.  

In the spirit of honest critique, I would offer the following:  

DU, Thank You

To the multiplayers
in my poetic game of life

Thanks [don't] feel enough  
( don't is a contraction of do not; therefore, would seem grammatically incorrect in this sense, i.e. - Thanks do not feel enough.  I think it would read better as doesn't, i.e. - Thanks does not feel enough. . .)

Caught with you saltin' my strife  
( Uncertain what this line implies. It reads as though someone ( in this case DU ) is rubbing salt in a wound? Saltin' my strife?  Or so you mean seasoning the strife in your life, thus making it more palatable? )

Raggedly, angry I try to be tough
( I recommend relocating the comma after angry )

These days I don't know how
to shut my mouth up
( Firstly, up is extraneous and unneeded.  Secondly, I think it could be said more tightly, i.e. - to button my lip.  You use mouth in a line below.  Think on that. )  

Thanks for the ear to my

loudmouth
battle bitch cry

( the enjambment seems off in this a tad in regards to reading with ease of flow.  Try this:  

Thanks for the ear
to my loudmouth  
battle-bitch cry  

I also suggest hyphenating battle-bitch ).

Hope that helps somewhat!  

I'm getting hasty.... knowing I should be doing chores! Love finding  this gem!!❤️

Gonna use ALL that advice.

I just reread the critique with eye to learning. Lately my poetry has been staggering around like a punch-drunk, unlearned Barbarian.... I appreciate your attempt to put some polish where needed. I totally agree with your critique. Planning to rewrite. After dealing with my family's needs...

But my mind and my attention span seems to be actually strengthening lately. It was taking a pounding for forever, worsening before that! Fighting suits me. I write so I don't lay down.

Paradoxically. I hope that's more than delusional positivity, something I seem very capable of. Ahem.

I hope I didn't overlook something helpful you pointed out. Kids are play-screaming in the house... constantly fracturing my focus...
(Mom-the-lifeguard, never fully at ease)
But I applied what I understood and hope it reads better now! I'm so glad for your assistance. ❤️✌️

It's always best to wait until you can focus to edit.

That's it! Your superpower.

I need to absorb that idea.

Also my husband's strength.