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Morning Mice
Warmth has helped you to uncurl
spread soft amongst the bedding.
A breeze has brought the swaying stalks
that whisper dreams from distant fields,
a tongue reveals a hungered look,
babbled under fresh melt brooks
that strokes your eyes to saucers.
A stretched out smile sets sail
on crushed up coracle leaves,
urgent through the rapids
then eddies tremble through the reeds.
Deep inside the riverbank
we twist entwined by tails,
and dance before the harvest
has time to find our veils.
spread soft amongst the bedding.
A breeze has brought the swaying stalks
that whisper dreams from distant fields,
a tongue reveals a hungered look,
babbled under fresh melt brooks
that strokes your eyes to saucers.
A stretched out smile sets sail
on crushed up coracle leaves,
urgent through the rapids
then eddies tremble through the reeds.
Deep inside the riverbank
we twist entwined by tails,
and dance before the harvest
has time to find our veils.
Written by
Razzerleaf
Published 16th Oct 2019
Author's Note
This is about as steamy as I get, so sorry if you are looking for something more graphic but it would make me blush just typing it.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. Morning Mice
16th Oct 2019 8:35pm
Still beautiful - the words could so easily be describing mice. I especially warm to these lines:
Deep inside the riverbank
we twist entwined by tails,
and dance before the harvest
has time to find our veils.
Anyway aren't rodents randy animals, given their prolificness?
Deep inside the riverbank
we twist entwined by tails,
and dance before the harvest
has time to find our veils.
Anyway aren't rodents randy animals, given their prolificness?
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Re: Re. Morning Mice
18th Oct 2019 7:54pm
Re. Morning Mice
16th Oct 2019 9:01pm
i love this :D
if anyone can't read this as erotica (as well as 'straight') then their imaginations are to blame.
if anyone can't read this as erotica (as well as 'straight') then their imaginations are to blame.
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18th Oct 2019 7:56pm
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Anonymous
27th Oct 2019 1:53am
Nicely presented, evokes vivid emotions without the gratuitous "porno" elements some others seem to need.
I find this to be more "erotic" than "neurotic"! THAT is a good thing!
I find this to be more "erotic" than "neurotic"! THAT is a good thing!
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Re: Re. Morning Mice
26th Nov 2019 1:14am
Thank you Bobby sorry I missed your comment, I cant do the porno writes, I think maybe Im a bit of a prude when it comes to all that.
Re. Morning Mice
15th Feb 2021 5:39am
This has such a simple beauty, it comes through very easy, romantic, nice entry :)
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Re: Re. Morning Mice
15th Feb 2021 9:42pm
Thank you very much PR its very kind of you to comment, much appreciated. R