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Noticing
In wonderment I walk with the day
billows blowing
noticing not,
a beginning nor an end
lost in the mist of the rain
I pause at the crosswalks
filled with children
on their way
not knowing
life from a game
smiles yield,
flowery umbrellas holding
the rain
and a world at bay
glistened eyes overcome
and I see their mothers
dreams, heartfelt nights
tireless songs of glee
intrepidity
the will amid the worry
cars turning left
moving right
no wrong in sight
the beginning to an end
they're at their end
I see youth in their eyes
glazing over moments
years/tears
it's not the end
I greet them
noticing
all that beauty
bellowing
silently from within
billows blowing
noticing not,
a beginning nor an end
lost in the mist of the rain
I pause at the crosswalks
filled with children
on their way
not knowing
life from a game
smiles yield,
flowery umbrellas holding
the rain
and a world at bay
glistened eyes overcome
and I see their mothers
dreams, heartfelt nights
tireless songs of glee
intrepidity
the will amid the worry
cars turning left
moving right
no wrong in sight
the beginning to an end
they're at their end
I see youth in their eyes
glazing over moments
years/tears
it's not the end
I greet them
noticing
all that beauty
bellowing
silently from within
Published 2nd Oct 2019
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2nd Oct 2019 5:56pm
I read of beautiful innocence
traveling along their path
knowing very little of what's to come
I am probably off the the mark here
but either way
Beautifully spilled, Brother
traveling along their path
knowing very little of what's to come
I am probably off the the mark here
but either way
Beautifully spilled, Brother
2nd Oct 2019 7:54pm
2nd Oct 2019 9:16pm
Tim this is a wonderful tribute to motherhood.
not knowing
life from a game
This is a perfect observation of children, and that final stanza is very moving.
Well done.
not knowing
life from a game
This is a perfect observation of children, and that final stanza is very moving.
Well done.
Anonymous
2nd Oct 2019 9:22pm
What a beautiful day in the life. A bit of whimsy and a lot of observation. Very nice! :-)
Anonymous
2nd Oct 2019 10:19pm
Lovely!
Fantastic observational write 🌹
Fantastic observational write 🌹
3rd Oct 2019 3:04am
dearest Tim you have a beautiful heart
and the eye of a true poet
you see so much of what everyday people miss
forgive my tardiness here
my eyes have been glazed...
powerful write...
love Brenda ❤
and the eye of a true poet
you see so much of what everyday people miss
forgive my tardiness here
my eyes have been glazed...
powerful write...
love Brenda ❤
3rd Oct 2019 5:47pm
This beautiful Tim! It captures the feels that you get when with your kids. RL material for sure!
-Minx❣
-Minx❣
4th Oct 2019 11:49pm
Damn powerful ink Tim...captures the human being in its natural state and the beauty of the child before all is lost in adulthood.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
6th Oct 2019 9:16am
