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Outlaw
I know I write in strictest rhyming form
In schemes that seem to flow like rivers do,
That some adore yet many others fear.
But damn! I’m a C-section from a storm,
That’s something no one understands or knew;
Ripped from the womb of Nature’s bitter tears.
On how to pen I never knew the rules.
I wandered on my own a vagabond,
An illustrator sketching words of verse.
I didn’t fuss or fret elitist fools,
With all their fancy ink I wouldn’t bond,
And ever since consider me a curse.
‘Cause here I am an outlaw to the last,
And was before I tried to scribe my first.
Be damn the rhyme, I write the future past,
To save a soul & quench an outlaw’s thirst.
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 25th Sep 2019
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Re. Outlaw
25th Sep 2019 7:52am
I'm steppin' in what you droppin'...as I flow in a rhyme most all the time...
Oh, poetic sister of mine,
J
Oh, poetic sister of mine,
J
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Re: Re. Outlaw
25th Sep 2019 8:02am
I thank you, Jeff, and let me press your hand,
A meeting of two poets as we stand.
A meeting of two poets as we stand.
Re. Outlaw
25th Sep 2019 8:41am
That 2nd stanza's metaphor -- wow wow holy cow!!
another read where i am left marveling!!
another read where i am left marveling!!
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25th Sep 2019 8:50am
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Hey, thanks so much for the recharge, HF. Yep, there’s some fooled by what they think I’m made of and try to test me.
News at 6, 8 and 10.🐾
News at 6, 8 and 10.🐾
Re. Outlaw
25th Sep 2019 12:59pm
A C-section from a storm! Oh yeah! Great line. Bring it Jade!
hugs,
buddhakitty .
hugs,
buddhakitty .
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Re: Re. Outlaw
29th Sep 2019 2:21pm
*apologies for being late in my reply* I’ll catch up, I promise...
Thank you sister Kitty, I’m pleased that you enjoyed my little trifle!
tiger hugs,
Jade🐾
Thank you sister Kitty, I’m pleased that you enjoyed my little trifle!
tiger hugs,
Jade🐾
Re. Outlaw
25th Sep 2019 10:26pm
Beautiful scansion and a forthright 'artists statement' in rhyme {good idea for a comp too to write one's own poetic statement} :))
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Oh dear! I’m glad I just now saw your comment, Josh, I missed seeing it when you posted it and had fallen through the crack.
I’m very appreciative for your thoughts on this ink of mine. Sometimes, the muse comes up with the darndest ways for me to express. This one was a kick.
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I’m very appreciative for your thoughts on this ink of mine. Sometimes, the muse comes up with the darndest ways for me to express. This one was a kick.
🐾
Re. Outlaw
25th Sep 2019 10:39pm
it made me smile to see you choose this iambic pentameter'd form with its regular rhyme scheme to deliver your message. just goes to show :D
so that's 16 lines, 4 x3liners and a 1x4liner made up of 2 rhyming couplets... is this a specific form (reminds me of an italian one) or is that you being a poetry-vagabond?
apart from all that, nice! especially L's 6/9/12/13/14
stuff to get my teeth into!
so that's 16 lines, 4 x3liners and a 1x4liner made up of 2 rhyming couplets... is this a specific form (reminds me of an italian one) or is that you being a poetry-vagabond?
apart from all that, nice! especially L's 6/9/12/13/14
stuff to get my teeth into!
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Re: Re. Outlaw
Hello, dear Jan... It’s lovely to find out how this made you smile! And naw, not a vagabond, just a poetic outlaw. *grins*
I’ve sent you a pm with more, and thanks so much!
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I’ve sent you a pm with more, and thanks so much!
🐾
Re. Outlaw
26th Sep 2019 3:01am
Ms Jade be a spittin' faya (that's fire).
Loved the way you structured it too.
Loved the way you structured it too.
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Re: Re. Outlaw
13th Oct 2019 5:36pm
Hi, Wally... and thanks so much for your support and fun comment! I always appreciate your observations.
I’ve sent you a pm with more.
🐾
I’ve sent you a pm with more.
🐾
Re. Outlaw
26th Sep 2019 5:01am
Dear J-P,
Well, shoot cowgirl! This here’s a brilliant write! I love how the narrator explains unapologetically that they aren't trained in writing poetry but they are self taught with an undeniable thirst that won’t be quashed by anyone or anything and I applaud that! So well done!
H🌷
Well, shoot cowgirl! This here’s a brilliant write! I love how the narrator explains unapologetically that they aren't trained in writing poetry but they are self taught with an undeniable thirst that won’t be quashed by anyone or anything and I applaud that! So well done!
H🌷
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Re. Outlaw
26th Sep 2019 10:17am
Outlaw 🐯! 😊
I loved loved this piece of work Jadey.
Both the delivery and the subject.... 😊
Critics can go suck on the tiger's territory mark.. 😉
I loved loved this piece of work Jadey.
Both the delivery and the subject.... 😊
Critics can go suck on the tiger's territory mark.. 😉
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13th Oct 2019 6:26pm
Re. Outlaw
26th Sep 2019 8:55pm
Refuse to be foolish refuse to be wise
Be both so that you can be neither
so you can go beyond the limits they set for you
I like your definition of Outlaw
(the highest level of self love)
Fear is a trap J. Tiger
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13th Oct 2019 6:29pm
Re. Outlaw
27th Sep 2019 1:31pm
I write in both structured rhyming verse and prose - whatever the Muse throws at me. There have been plenty of rule-breakers in poetry circles, and there is plenty more room for others too. Poetry is a very broad church indeed. Nicely penned!
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Re: Re. Outlaw
13th Oct 2019 6:10pm
My gratitude for your appreciation & support, and hope you’ve been doing well. My apology for responding so late.
Re. Outlaw
13th Oct 2019 8:11am
And there's people like me who doesn't even care to know about any techniques. Whatever fits the mood is the way to go. Beautiful write as always with exceptional imagery.
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Re: Re. Outlaw
13th Oct 2019 5:55pm
Thank you very much, my friend, for your visit, and your kind support! I appreciate your thoughtfulness more than I can say.🙏🏻
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3rd Nov 2019 8:31pm
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Ohhh ma fille! I /knew/ I had seen this comment of yours /somewhere/ ...I’ve been looking high & low ever since. Now, oh my stars, I’ve just come upon it!
At least I’m able to acknowledge your moving words before the page flips to a new month. And I’m honored, humbled & touched in all thevright places (whatever that bit means).
Also... My wishes to you for wonderful things this holiday season!
🐾💌
At least I’m able to acknowledge your moving words before the page flips to a new month. And I’m honored, humbled & touched in all thevright places (whatever that bit means).
Also... My wishes to you for wonderful things this holiday season!
🐾💌
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2nd Dec 2019 2:32am
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