The Quiet

punchy poetry prolific poetess

Lol, one of those nights I guess. Thanks for stopping in and commenting Oblivion.

-Minxy❣

Good luck in your hunt,  
but do watch out for all those
liars, cheats and fools.

Lmao, just fantasies to be lived out in ink lovely! But thanks for the warning!
-M❣

Many may take you
literally; and, if so,
take them with a pinch...

Smiles

Well, now i dont have to make the sex joke baby! You just did, lol! Good Lord I have corrupted you HF!

This is some good stuff, Minx.  It’s powerful and it’s vulnerable.  Excellent 💜.

Thank you Luna. I love it when these spills just bubble up quickly. Almost as if they were waiting for that exact moment to enlighten us. That what's this was.  As always, thanks for the read and comment Lovely!
-Minxy❣

this reads and paints a picture of a shared meditation

quiet.....
hugs.....
focus on breathing
listening
being

Wonderful spill, Minxy

BEAUTIFULLY COMPOSED POETESS...HEART FELT WITH PASSION AND LOVE

You know Stoney, you are very astute in your observation here. This was absolutely composed with a passionate desire to bond with my man before we both face our days. Somehow remembering I am HIS during the day makes it a whole lot easier to get through. Thanks for your RL add. I am honored sweetheart!  
 
-Minx❣

YOU ARE VERY WELCOME ITS A WONDERFUL THING TO HAVE AND TO HOLD THOSE SPECIAL MOMENTS TO SHARE IN THE EARLY MORNING JUST BEFORE YOUR START YOUR DAY...PRICELESS

Very nice descriptive; but for me the first line seems forced, a bit tortured gramatically

I would clip it out and maybe drop the "just" in the second line and in the second to last line

Just for me in this comes a cross as a little weak where as if you take them out the writing speaks with a greater confidence if that makes sense?

But the rest is atmospheric and relateable to a moment of two people taking solace and comfort in each other universal and beautiful

Hi Commentonly! Thank you for reading this and I appreciate both your critique and the way you delivered it. I know my grammar is awful. Can I get away with bad grammar is my poetic style? Yeah, I know. That's so lame. I'm going to look into your suggestions. Thank you always for taking time to comment!
-Minxy❣

It's  your writing; if thats your choice it's your choice.

It's merely a suggestion and by no means a demand. Think about it even if you don't change it it wont stop me reading your work

I sometimes open my mouth without looking at the request on the bottom of the piece 😳

Oh no Comment! I appreciate it. I am trying to clean up my writing and learn about poetry in general. You're feedback really made a difference! It cleaned it up of all the extra words that muddled  it up. It  is so much better. Thank you again.

-Minxy❣

Oh no Comment! I appreciate it. I am trying to clean up my writing and learn about poetry in general. You're feedback really made a difference! It cleaned it up of all the extra words that muddled  it up. It  is so much better. Thank you again.

-Minxy❣

Paints picture of an early morning bedroom scene (I can visualise her wrapping her arms around his torso) before separately going to work.