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the whole that is never empty
may the truth rest upon
us like the hand of
a father tousling
the hair of a
beloved
child
may the truth pierce us
like the daggers of
Caesar on a
dark blue
Roman
night
may the truth be as
beautiful as a pair
of eyes that you
fall in love w/
on first
sight
may the truth be a brutal
war in which you would
choose death over
dishonor and
disgrace
may the truth be just that-
the truth-not what you
want it to be, wish it
to be, but what it
actually is, even
if that truth is
not in your
favor
-the truth of the truth is
that-
the truth cannot save us or
set us free, but it is the
holy grail that sings
of how we have
lived our
lives
Published 21st Sep 2019
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21st Sep 2019 4:42pm
love this expression
and the Dagger form BK!
you nailed it
the last stanza.
gem.
and the Dagger form BK!
you nailed it
the last stanza.
gem.
21st Sep 2019 6:08pm
Thank you for the kind words. Much appreciated cold fusion .
pax,
buddhakitty.
pax,
buddhakitty.
21st Sep 2019 6:44pm
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21st Sep 2019 7:21pm
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21st Sep 2019 7:24pm
hiya, bk :)
that opening stanza was a delight to read. the form lends teeth - you make the point that Truth can be an uncomfortable thing, and it shouldn't be a cosy concept; Truth is a clean, sharp blade and offers no apologies.
i have a few reflections to offer, take or leave as you see fit :)
may the truth perice us --- typo - pierce
like the daggers of
Caesar on a ----- the daggers of Ceasar: they belong to him inasmuch as they're in him but that feels a muddy spot. maybe i'm being picky there as i can understand the overall intent
dark blue
Roman
night -----love those three lines!
may the truth be as
beautiful as a pair
of eye's that you ---- no apostrophe in eyes
all in love w/ ---- 'with' or a deliberate contraction indicating 'with or on first sight'?
on first
sight
that opening stanza was a delight to read. the form lends teeth - you make the point that Truth can be an uncomfortable thing, and it shouldn't be a cosy concept; Truth is a clean, sharp blade and offers no apologies.
i have a few reflections to offer, take or leave as you see fit :)
may the truth perice us --- typo - pierce
like the daggers of
Caesar on a ----- the daggers of Ceasar: they belong to him inasmuch as they're in him but that feels a muddy spot. maybe i'm being picky there as i can understand the overall intent
dark blue
Roman
night -----love those three lines!
may the truth be as
beautiful as a pair
of eye's that you ---- no apostrophe in eyes
all in love w/ ---- 'with' or a deliberate contraction indicating 'with or on first sight'?
on first
sight
Thanks for the kind words and catching the spelling error and the eyes punctuation error. I have fixed those. The other two it looks like are a matter of creative preference., however, pointing things out like this is always welcomed by buddhakitty.
hugs now,
buddhakitty
hugs now,
buddhakitty
22nd Sep 2019 4:24am
Dear BK,
This made me wish we were taught this in catechism instead of the Apostles’ Creed. Beautiful.
H🌷
This made me wish we were taught this in catechism instead of the Apostles’ Creed. Beautiful.
H🌷
22nd Sep 2019 4:50am
The truth has to be a whole lot better than what we have now. Thank you Honoria.
hug's
buddhakitty.
hug's
buddhakitty.
22nd Sep 2019 9:12am
22nd Sep 2019 12:21pm
