Voyager

Sail on Jade.  Excellent write.



hugs,
buddhakitty.

Thank you, dearest Kitty, for your kind sendoff.  

many tiger hugs,
Jade🐾

Gorgeous lines, Jade.  Love the rhyming and how evocative this is.  May your dreams set sail into a lovely horizon.

Thank you so much, my dear crowfly friend, for the time we got to spend talking and reading to each other our poetry - it’s been a while.

And the words you’ve given me here are so lovely & touching- and thank you for a place of honor on your RL.🐅

Jadey🐾

Thank you kindly, Playdate, for sharing your thoughts on my ink, impacting you as both a poet & a reader.  It’s all very much appreciated.

I love a good sailing rhyme...a pleasant voyage...

It’s nice to see that you came by for a read.  It’s been a long time, so I’m glad you find this ink a pleasant passing of the day.  A comfort piece.

I appreciate what Crowfly and Playdate had to say. It reminds me in spirit of the Rime of the Ancient Mariner. The eloquence of it's crafting is laudable, but I think the most important quality is how relatable it is. As beings of higher consciousness than is strictly necessary to navigate our environment, we are voyagers, stargazers, seeking ever new, rough hewn horizons. <3

Thank you, my friend, I’m glad you connected, and yes ...always looking beyond, and me the dreamer.

adept use of iambic pentameter and the form for this piece, jade. too often i read lines shoe-horned to fit a form and that ruins a poem, but the repeated line you used here sits perfectly in context throughout all four strophes - and that's a pleasure to read.

one thought: have you considered 'skin grow pale' instead of 'skin go pale'? it's a more active description is all....

Hi, Jan, nice of you to stop by with your thoughts.

I feel you when it comes to how some poets try the shoehorn method while attempting rhyme scheme.

Meantime, yes indeed I have considered grow vs go, and I don’t care for either.  I’m not trying to decide in case an alternative comes to mind.  But thank you for your consideration and the suggestion.

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'and i don't care for either' lol that's so me sometimes. i can vacillate for years., change a word and STILL not be sure.

you're welcome, it was a pleasure to read.

Terrific observation Butters and nice to meet you. :)

hey, good to meet you, too *waves*

O gosh, thank you so much for that, HF...

and I’ll leave things just as they are cause timing is everything
(meaning I got here to see your comment while in an open mind after publishing a new ink).✍🏻

Dear J-P,

This makes me want to go to the beach and sit by the ocean and dream with waves gently rolling in. I love how sweetly this flowed and how dreamy I felt (not a single ounce of seasickness)
Beautiful write! H🌷

My gratitude that you’ve shared this with me, dearest Honoria, because I’m always humbled and honored when any poetry of mine gives a reader such tranquility, such peace, as you’ve describe.

A tiger’s thanks,
Jade🐾

This brought tears to my eyes.

Oh Kathy, how dear this is of you to share.  And thank you for the honor.