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couplet rhyme...
she forgets...
forgets the love that she once had...
confusion sucking the life out of her....
she feels weak..
weak from all the labor and hard work....
falling to her knees and holding her self tight...
wondering, is this right??
her mind in a vortex of thoughts that spirals around a dozen times..
dissolving in a couplet rhyme...
she cry...
she shuffles to find that place..
a place of happiness,fun and smiles..
but she gets weak..ill...
she die out from weariness...
disappointed in the life she has created...
a monster...
believing the exhaustion is from her losing her love...
but only to find out that its from loosing herself....
closing her eyes to believe that one day it will end.
her mind in a cyclone of thoughts that twists around a dozen times..
dissolving.. in a couplet rhyme...
-Kumiko Yamamoto
forgets the love that she once had...
confusion sucking the life out of her....
she feels weak..
weak from all the labor and hard work....
falling to her knees and holding her self tight...
wondering, is this right??
her mind in a vortex of thoughts that spirals around a dozen times..
dissolving in a couplet rhyme...
she cry...
she shuffles to find that place..
a place of happiness,fun and smiles..
but she gets weak..ill...
she die out from weariness...
disappointed in the life she has created...
a monster...
believing the exhaustion is from her losing her love...
but only to find out that its from loosing herself....
closing her eyes to believe that one day it will end.
her mind in a cyclone of thoughts that twists around a dozen times..
dissolving.. in a couplet rhyme...
-Kumiko Yamamoto
Written by
AlexnEmoLand
(RevolutionOfAlex)
Published 20th Dec 2011
| Edited 7th Jul 2012
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re: good
20th Dec 2011 2:02am
:p
20th Dec 2011 2:14am
re: :p
20th Dec 2011 2:28am
kumi girl heheheh
20th Dec 2011 2:49am
well our many conversations have been a discovery for me and also you discover yourself in your words as this is really fucking good sexy lady heheh and your english is improving no end it's very good well done kumi xxx
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re: kumi girl heheheh
20th Dec 2011 3:07am
I love it!!!
Anonymous
20th Dec 2011 4:31am
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re: I love it!!!
20th Dec 2011 5:14am
•konnichiwa
Anonymous
20th Dec 2011 9:58am
This is a lovely piece, and you are doing so well. I really like this a lot.
Well done Kumiko
Al-x- (very proud of you!)
Well done Kumiko
Al-x- (very proud of you!)

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re: •konnichiwa
20th Dec 2011 6:46pm
Touching
20th Dec 2011 4:11pm
Very touching. It's nice to know that there are girls like you so sensitive.
I think this is the best place to improve the English language and its poetry.
I think this is the best place to improve the English language and its poetry.
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re: Touching
20th Dec 2011 6:46pm
beautiful!
22nd Dec 2011 1:34am
re: beautiful!
22nd Dec 2011 1:47am
couplet rhyme...
Anonymous
23rd Dec 2011 2:59am
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re: couplet rhyme...
23rd Dec 2011 3:41am
Nice write
23rd Dec 2011 11:38pm
You point to a metaphor that people often talk about regarding relationships; how we may be so engaged in a partnership that we lose our perspective or "own voice".
One of my favorites among the pieces you have crafted.
One of my favorites among the pieces you have crafted.
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re: Nice write
24th Dec 2011 00:28am
re: re: Nice write
thank you for sharing...very easy to see your growth and ever expanding command of that language called English. Hopefully even after you become an English teacher (joke) you will always been open to learning and knowledge.
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re: re: re: Nice write
24th Dec 2011 4:59am
Sadly sweet...
13th Jan 2012 3:31pm
re: Sadly sweet...
13th Jan 2012 7:35pm
kolin
25th Feb 2012 11:23am
re: kolin
25th Feb 2012 7:25pm
Re: couplet rhyme...
7th Aug 2012 1:00am
re: Re: couplet rhyme...
7th Aug 2012 1:10am